Heaven and hell (Dont sleep)

[Pillow]

This is a piece i plan to recored very soon. please gimmme some feedback about what u think about it so far. thanks.....

~Heaven~

Lord, embrace me, let me leave this cruel place//
Enter your holy grace, and erase my disgrace w/o a trace//
I’m not perfect, I come correct when I say my life is a wreck//
I reflect back into time, and hope I can earn your respect//
Frustrations, I’ve gone thru so many different trials and tribulations//
I do have the patience, and I hope I can live up to your expectations//
Gone astray, my life is slowly fading away each day//
I pray, that I make it to Heaven with out any delay//
So slow, that it took me this long to know//
That the golden glow is where I want to go//

~Hell~

In hell cause i commited to many sins, smoked to many tress//
Flames upon me, my temperature is rising from the degrees//
Souls floating in a red sea, and I’m surrounded by burning debris//
I beg and plea, millions of hands reaching, I must flee//
Terrified, please Lord don’t let this place be my eternity//
Was I untrue? Can someone give me the answers I pursue?
Or am I destined to subdue the evil that surrounds my view//
Bombarded with doom, my life is shattered, torn, and scarred//
It’s so hard, knowing that I cannot disregard Satan’s yard//
I reminisce, about good times, nothing but joy and bliss//
That I miss, because now I exist in a hellish abyss//

peace........

~Blanket~

[Reef]

I was really feelin that.. Cant wait for the auido...

[bez]

man that was cool, like gareffa said, shit was tight and the audio should be cool too.  Flowed well nd everything, cool

[An-Tony-O Montana]

yeah i loved that shit man very niiice piece... i got a track i wrote called "Heaven & Hell" too but it's different maybe i'll post it but this shit was niice n had a good flow to it... anxious 2 hear the audio...

~1~

[~|~PimpFemcee~|~]

Ayo Blankets.. Do you post at realemcees.com?

[Pillow]

Ayo Blankets.. Do you post at realemcees.com?

yea, i have been postin there since like last december. i post there with the name "Mr. Good Bar"  

[~|~PimpFemcee~|~]

 ...really can you do me a fav then..can you IM me really quick gotta tell you something my AIM name is PimpFemcee or PM on this board...

[Mr. Good Bar]

You didnt think I would find you? This Mother Fucker Bit my poem...someone needs to ban his ass ASAP....fuckin bitch..there is only one Mr. Good Bar and its me (AIM=Fabeyan1) PimpFemcee was right about you...fuckin sorry ass bitch.....oh yea, I wanna thank everyone who replied to MY PIECE...ban his ass pz`1

[Pillow]

^^ lol femcee workin hard.