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Elements => The Studio => Topic started by: Natural_Instinc on June 14, 2002, 11:20:34 AM

Title: an untitled drop....give feedback pleez...
Post by: Natural_Instinc on June 14, 2002, 11:20:34 AM
sittin riddled at my ma's crib...fueled..bedroom thinkin~ l shrinkin, smolderin the mood, cruel livid/
flip it vivid...freshen time with a peppermint mind~ spillin v.class moves as a letterman a rhyme/
pressin fine, break the strain...gainin off the line engaged~ pavin way into motion off the stillness primed in fate/
if its great, catch me poppin...gotta second? watch me rock it!~ try to question what im spittin -n you'll only lose ya noggin/
shoot the honest, and i plummit..speakin easy underground~ peakin everest, climbin mountains jus to get to the clouds/
call me proud, kick the confidence...broke -n still leechin~ a scholar a the rythem but a kid who hates readin /
follow reason..yes a student...unemployed..conscious fuedin~
clenchin hard on the real and gettin chills from the music/
middle class rooted, seperate, combine....flop the minimal~
twinin..call it stuck ...jus a knock away from pitiful/
no ridicule untypical....obliterated literal ~ poundin past the prescense to escape -n change the visual/
a rigid pull lingering inside the cracks im quakin~ drivin charged off the grind, when all i really want is paticence/



Title: Re: an untitled drop....give feedback pleez...
Post by: PakiGangsta on June 14, 2002, 12:54:00 PM
that was really very nice...good use of multis...and it was really very good......
Title: Re: an untitled drop....give feedback pleez...
Post by: ChildOfMuthaNature on June 15, 2002, 01:12:25 AM
nice rhyme but hard to decipher
Title: Re: an untitled drop....give feedback pleez...
Post by: 'Illicit' on June 15, 2002, 12:38:42 PM
yeh I agree, create a line order so its easier to follow.

but dope piece dawg.
Title: Re: an untitled drop....give feedback pleez...
Post by: :.Da6shoota.: on June 15, 2002, 11:16:09 PM
That shit was wack!

Brush up on them lyrical skillz or U'll get ripped  :o
Title: Re: an untitled drop....give feedback pleez...
Post by: 'Illicit' on June 16, 2002, 06:25:42 AM
at least he tryin man, he wanted feedback,  that wasnt wack, it may not have been good but def not wack compared to some shit bein dropped on this board.