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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: abstruse on March 09, 2003, 04:24:25 PM

Title: another keystyle
Post by: abstruse on March 09, 2003, 04:24:25 PM

mah bad about it bein small and stuff whatever, gimme feedback.

ya dont *realize* whos who till real shit-goes-down /
*sterilize* ya own mind till ya alone, wit no one around /
so how we truely know when a friendships-been-found /
unable to *prophecise* the period when friends-become-unbound  /
well that days here, dont come within inch, nevah stand near /
the brother-love we had, has now dissapeared /
we was close *spiritually*, finishin eachothers sentence /
now to know *mentally*, that you was all pretense /
hard to think mah beloved-brother /
is now my hated-*enemy* /

Title: Re:another keystyle
Post by: |JEM|ILL| on March 09, 2003, 05:44:33 PM

horrible...no flow...you need work kid.

Title: Re:another keystyle
Post by: ·SiNiStEr· on March 09, 2003, 05:51:13 PM

not many multis, extremely hard to understand, ya had no title and u didnt get a point across.
u have potential just put yo shit together and get a new vocabulary.

Title: Re:another keystyle
Post by: abstruse on March 09, 2003, 05:54:29 PM

at least you honest. thnx for that.

Title: Re:another keystyle
Post by: TheSheriff on March 09, 2003, 05:57:24 PM

Not horrific, not great. Average 1.5-2/5

A bit simplistic