Sweet Pain (Dedication)

[Tha Psycho Hustla]

I Know You People Don´t Take Me Serious Here Because Of My "Ganxta Ebonikz" But Please Leave Your Feedback.
It´s Straight From The Heart.

                                                                --SWEET PAIN (DEDICATION)--


i swear to god
i never thought i would be in love again,
who thought,my life would be that insane?
counting days,waiting,when will i see you again?
even hearin your voice,makes me feel stronger
prayin to lord, it would be last a minute longer
minutes seem to be days, days seem to be months
i wish you knew,i cant tell,cant find the right words
no words can describe,im crying for you like jodeci
i wish i never met ya,just cant forget ya, but you cant see
oh lord,why is the world so cold,
i would die for ya,infornt of your beautful eyes
like i never excisted
maybe you then you´ll realise, my demise,you
got me twisted,addicted
like you´re "lady heroin",you get me in nirvana
no more pain,fights, lonely nights and drama
i wish i could kiss your eyes,just one time,
next second i could die, lord you take my life
ill give it back to you, thank you
theres nothing left, i got nothing live for
that only one kiss could save my life before
but now, its over, im on the deadly edge
i trapped in my own thoughts, in a cage
hopeless,pure stress, smokin cigarettes
thinkin of you, with you for ever and ever
even youre livin your life, own problems and all
i know it, dats why i hit the weed n alcohol
im fear-free,even i think about my own death
but ill never give up,til´my last fuckin breath
true feelings, til my last drip of blood in my vein
i call it "love", my definition of a "sweet pain"

[Raphael]

wicked mon

[Tha Psycho Hustla]

what yall think?

['Illicit']

as a poem and bein that its a personal piece, its aight. coulda gotten more creative with it but i aint knockin it, just sayin.

peace

[Tha Psycho Hustla]

^^ wht you mean "more creative"?
criticise me.

['Illicit']

more or better wordplay for example. bein that your piece is called sweet pain and bein, if i got it right that is, in the end you come out and say sweet pain is what your definition of what love is, then you coulda made it more interesting by creating more metaphors and similes with certain lines you wrote.

[Tha Psycho Hustla]

thanks.
what about others?
tell more.

[Tha Psycho Hustla]

  no one else?

[Tha Psycho Hustla]

 

[Tha Psycho Hustla]

now fa real, nobody has to say somethin about it?