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Respect -- Freestyle -- Explicit -- (READ)
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Tha Muthafuckin Don - Explicit
Lil Geezy
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Til i collapse, i'm spillin these raps...
Respect -- Freestyle -- Explicit -- (READ)
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June 27, 2002, 01:57:23 AM »
Hey Ya'll heres another freestyle i want ya'll to read and tell me what ya think, and give me some tips. I only been on here a while and already in the illest newbie on here... lol
Here is my verse :
Need notification, or your be dead on arrival, then i can rise to tha occasion// Maintain self control, show no mercy for the life i let go// Turned the other way, without hesitation// Contort with self pitty, guilt in the horizon// Slowly risin to the top of the mountain i should get some respect, my raps flow as well, as a newly manufactured water fountain// Respect is the key to sucsess, without it, your at the bottom, unable to be the best// The illest newbie on the wcc// With 110%// Im on the right path, to perfect enlitenment// Outrun the illest wannabe's// Exploited their everymove, to all the elite wcc g's// Makin every newbie hit the floor// No respect, i will have// i'll leave just enough time for my audience to aplause// Sick to tha stomach, frozen inside// Not noin wether to fight, or team up with// Your decision, must be right// Cos the time had come, for the era of explicit// Leave the war with Legendary Trophey, with my name engraved on it//
So how'd it flow? You tell me... Thanx in advance..!
Peace -- Explicit
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Re: Respect -- Freestyle -- Explicit -- (READ)
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Not bad.. ur other verse was better, but this one didnt seem to make as much sense... try and make all your bars about the same thing.. especally wen u sed this freestyle was called respect.. you seemed to drift off that topic a bit, try and rhyme a biy more coz the lack of rhymes made the flow a bit wack IMO..
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