Drop your favourit piece you've write

[da_notorious_mack]

And give opinionz of others work.Ill start .
Took off work a couple of weeks back...went down to da beach and jus chilled there for bout 3 hours...didnt bring any of da boyz, no drugz, just a pencil and ma flow book...didnt write any battle verses, one liners, or any shit like that...str8 chilled out there and kicked knowledge...yall feel this shit aight...


Swirls-of-motion...twisted around words-of-fate,
came-to-late, as we bear the brunt-of-this-hate,
I lure-the-bait...of angels in dark-suits,
teathered-boots, family lost as i snip-the-roots,
Death-shoots...devils created around myths-of-lies,
hidden-spies, hell-related as i find Satan in family-ties,
Red-in-my-eyes...beating the life out-of-a-wish,
fire-lavish, breath undeteced like the life-of-a-fish,
Served as a dish...worlds collide for binded-powers,
my-life-cowers, God selfish as its souls-he-devours,
Lightning-showers...as the skies refuse-to-shine,
Earths-acceptance-of-mankind, what are we destined-to-find?,

Breaking our-next-of-kin...barriers broken in the-main-event,
Live repent, hearts of men sent to war because the message-was-sent,
Hell-bent...as nations are winning-not-surviving,
evil-is-striving, the devils forces-are-driving,
Hell-pools-are-dividing...hate-in-demand,
It was all-in-Gods-plan, future defeated, life-could-not stand,
Humans-killed-by-man...death decided by a show-of-hands-notion...

this is prolly my favorite that i threw down...i woprked on it alot so lemme know what u think...live it yall

[Entreri117]

Yeah...man, I was feelin this piece.  I liked the deepness you came with.

I don't have one piece thats my favorite.  I have two of em, so I'll post em both...

I sit back, and watch the world evolve/
My mind slips as I slowly begin to dissolve//
People killin people, people fightin people/
world full of drugs sluts and needles//
No friends, and the proclaimed and pronounced outcast/
wishin every breath of air I take will be my last//
No reason to live, why should I go on surviving?/
too many people fakin and are some fuckin liars and keep coniving//
Feel like puttin a Glock to my dome and pullin the trigger/
but I ain't got no bullets and nothin to help the bullet deliver//
I wanna stand on the highest mountain, and yell FUCK THE WORLD/
as loud as my lungs will allow me, my life ain't no pearl//
People wanna kill me...people wanna beat me/
people wanna make me extinct...bury me...then leave me//
every person is just like the next, an asshole who wanna see you fail/
would rather have you lyin six-feet-under or inducted into the nearest jail//
Too much racism, people killin just of your ancestors or the color of ya skin/
hate, war, death, and Satan make me fucked up when in my head they come in//
Too much hate, and not enough love on this planet/
all the war and all the death is too much for my young mind to manage//
I have a handful of people who care about my life/
if that...but they won't be there when the snake goes in for the strike//
I don't understand why I'm here, but I'ma live my life while I can breathe/
fuck all my advesaries and enemies, but they'll eventually catch up to me//
When the time comes that I have to leave this Earth, and I start to see swirls/
I'ma take the biggest breath I ever took, then I'm going to yell FUCK THE WOLRD!//
I can't take the pain anymore, I'm entering delerium/
burnin my assassins in my mind...I'm straight searin em'//
I just don't give a fuck, I'll say it untill my last final breath/
I have hated the world from when I was born till I have reached death//

I can't change the way I am, and I don't apologize for what I say/
With hostility and vengence in my heart, I'll leave your whole neighborhood blown away//
I strike fear into the hearts of the heartless, and no human alive can stop this/
Even if you were playin a special teams defense, you still couldn't block this//
Hopeless like 2pac, and I just don't give a fuck like the one and only Slim Shady/
I'm insane and sadistick enough to strangle and beat down a random lady//
I can't stress enough to you why I just don't give a single goddamn/
My brain and heart is too fucked up for anyone to simply understand//  
I can't see past the walls that conceal me into a life of eternal damnation/
A creation, but I'll never be willing or brave enough to lead a nation//
An army of hipocritical and criticizing assholes is what I fight every moment/
I'd rather be dormant than to live this unendurable life of torment//
I wake up every morning, just wishing I would have an accident to end it all/
My own legs can't hold up the weight of my lifeless body, I think I'm gonna fall//
I can snap on a person at the drop of a hat, or I can be the nicest person you know/
All the time, I make it show, but I would rather strap some C4 to my body and explode//
I don't understand these feelings I feel, I think I might be a schitzo with another personality/
Hip Hop and Rap music are the only things that are keeping me in touch with true reality//
I can feel the rage building inside my brain, and I don't know if I can keep holding on/
The rapid lightning and booming thunder is all I sense, like a lethal and fatal storm//
Since the moment and split second where I was born, I was already deceased/
Insecurities and hateful thoughts feeding on my conscience like a Thanksgiving feast//
I'm confused...dazed...I don't know where I'm goin or why I'm goin there/
I hope you're not scared by these facts of my life that I have just shared//

[Pillow]

first off i would like to say both all three of them verses dropped were VERY nice....but i also have to favs....so i again...will also drop both........
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                          MY BEST PAL
Yo l lost my dad at the age of 16//i had just got into tha rap game starting ta make the green//but then one day while he was in his hospital bead//his breathing just stopped and the doc pronounced him dead//i could see it//but fuck i couldn’t believe it//my pops was really gone//he was now in heaven for the start of a new dawn//i remember early in tha morning he would getup and say ADAM come out here and mow the lawn//memories like that keep me going//cause there has been points where i have been suicidal//since he past my life has been very vital//but i gotta stay around so i can earn the rap title//and see my little sisters very 1st recital//and ta take care of my moms//keep her calm//and hug her when she’s sad//cause she just like me, she miss the hell out of my dad//i will always remember that name AL//case we did everything together, fuck, he was my best pal//  

(Hook)
I don't know why the have to die/
They were the sunshine glittering in my eye/
They were worth more to me than a pot of gold/
All im waiting for is my life to unfold/

Yo i also lost my uncle at the age of 16//the whole mother fucking mess just seemed like a bad dream//two family members sick and on there death bead//my uncle and my father//this was the worst shit i have ever seen, even worse then man slaughter//or a dad rapping his daughter/shit was unbearable//so damn terrible//cause we were so close, me and my uncle//we did everything together from baseball to pinnacle//i used to sit on couch and chuckle//as my uncle would sit there, flip channels and crack jokes//and play humorous Hokes//he was a jolly ol man//that did not deserve ta kick can//but he couldn’t fight that FUCKED up disease called cancer//if it was any other situation, i would have got him a lap dancer//i mean FUCK he was only 43//cant you see?//this man did not deserve this fatality//he was nice to evryone//didnt have son//but considered me one//and i considered him a second father//there were many situations in my life in which a regular uncle wouldn’t even bother//but he was far from regular//he was the best uncle on planet earth//he was the nicest mother fucker ever since berth//i ll be the first ta tell ya, he did not deserve this curse//and i ask u god//WHY ME//especially two of my closest peeps//who you took up ta heaven, and kept for keeps//but one day i will see them again//resting, talking together up in heaven den//  

(Hook)
I don't know why the have to die/
They were the sunshine glittering in my eye/
They were worth more to me than a pot of gold/
All im waiting for is my life to unfold/
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                       MONEY MONEY MONEY
Would you sell your soul for scrill//
Some have//
some will//
anything to pay the bills//
even kill another human being//
so ill to my stomach//
Ironic how money make the man//
make him run with a gun in hand//
make him plot and plan//
designs of evil all to gain cash and land//
Will he ever understand//
that money comes and goes likegrains of sand//
Oh no, greed killed the cat, when he had too much, his own rats pulled the gat//
See, the love of money is the root of all kinds of evil, it rules all kinds of people//
floss it around and this is how they greet you//

"Dear Mister, I see money grows on you like blisters//
akes you look flashy and crisper//
what can I do to ride the bandwagon with the rest of the fakes//
who wanna rob ya blind and won't hesitate to pull the trigger//
and get a hold of your eastate//
Big mistake//
if you think t'll take you to the top of the cake//
all the cash you make//
won't get you any brakes/
when you battle the snake//
Would you sell your body for money//

Embalm your temple with honey caress it with sin//
It's funny, how ladies sell their image to lusting males//
producing more semen than a thousand whales//
All the while kid's at home looking for a mother to read him fairy tales//
kiss him goodnight, and tell him dad's not in jail//
Oh well that's their mentality I gotta get mine, what a brutality//
get on the grind, causing fatalities//
come again you say? See, females sharing nfected genitals is like blood on defective urinals//
unhealthy. But they wanna get wealthy//
so they spread a disease that kills innocent babies, prance around like -dogs with rabies//
but maybe they don't take it to the extreme//
the supreme reality is one got raped in the back of the alley//
take you back an hour to a club in Cali//
erotic dancing showing more han the belly/
this man couldn't hold the tempation, so without hesitation//
he waited for the bar to close//
when she put on her clothesand left, he was waiting for her and this was no theft//
Grabbed her by the head, now she's bereft//
of her virginity, and felicity//
See this girl was only eighteen, college attendant who wanted to pay her tuition//
so she decided to strip for men, but never thought of her rapist's sexual ingnition//

yo, those are my to favs. let me know what cha u all think.....thanks
peace.........

..::TinMaN::..

['Illicit']

yo this is a tight thread, theres this song im workin on, and I got this idea, its fictious but I like it. and I'm proud of my work, even tho it may not be the best....

title: The Day He Took Two Shots


The day he took two shots was when i
was walkin down the streets wit mah homie
didnt think of nothin bad when suddenly
a car pulled up
somebody hung out tha window
pulled out his gat and struck
him twice in the chest
contemplatin death
or layin their left to rest
til rescue arrived hopin the best
the doctor was assumin paralyzation from the neck
I had to watch it
listened to the words he uttered
jus remember I'll always love you
please dont forget it each breath he stuttered
hospital time is what im facin
hope you got my back
you and me always ridin
nuthin's for real we jus laughed
drinkin, fightin
lookin for fun wit girls every night
thinkin, life
aint mean shit to me but the mic
you had my back when things got deep
and i apreciate it
even tho we had problems
we never seperated
homie dont worry i responded
I'll always be here
held back tears
cuz i knew his wounds were severe
I prayed to god he'll be better
by any chance any day
I couldnt stand the thought of him takin my homie away
please!


Chrous:

God, i know i don't pray often though I should
forgive us for our sins and let my homie be good
even though I cant see ya, I know your there
hope you heard me in this moment of despair





lyrcially maybe not outstanding but it has something to it that i like, when I'm done with it I'll let ya'll peep the rest...