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My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it.....
« on: May 01, 2002, 02:35:18 PM »
Ever since I popped out my mom lifes been fucked
With so many drugs and not enough love
SHIT it sucked
And its been this way for 16 years
Its makes me drink 16 beers
Jus’ a hopin it makes my head clear//
At age 2 my dad split
Leaving my mom prizeless even at night
Age 3 it was me under the spotlight
I was in the hospital with just an inch of life
Shit I was so fuukin sick they almost pulled the plug
Damn I’m so glad they didn’t
Age 5 on so many medications
Trying to bring my wired ass to sedation
Started meditatin’ and levitatin’
Its got my ass scared of satan//
So many FUCKIN pills made my ass real nutty
Who was I to turn to? Shit I had nobody
My mom was in tha bar and my dad was doin lines
And my crazy babysitter lied and said I was fine
Crazy bitch threw me in the road to be hit by a car
Locked me in the bedroom and played hir guitar//
Those fucking strings covered my fucking screams
Got so much anger hiddin inside of me
Now I hit the teens, mom became a crack addict and moved away daddy left me for some bitch and left state//
So I lived with my grandma…..shit turned crazy
Mini thins and razor blades that shit adds up
Crackheads fanatical snack pack got my ass hyped up
I was ignored for 3 fuckin years while I raised my bro
He didn’t need that shit he was only 6 years old
But at the time I cried myself to sleep cuz of my mother
I missed her ass so bad it was like no other//
One day at school my mom shows up
She'd sobered up and moved back to be beside-a-me
I moved back wit my mom which was so damn selfish
I left my crazy grandma depressed and helpless//
I still remember tha day she cried cuz I told her the news
you were so happy grandma you had tears in your eyes
jumped up and told everyone ! man it changed your life
Hell a lot more than I thought tho
A little while after crack was all that you bought yo//
Now Im almost all growed up and I just got the word
My cousin ended his life…worst shit I ever heard
The sound of the phone ringing so early in the day
So god damn shocking that his life would end this way//
My moms doing crack again
My dads flippin again “wheres my fuckin mini thins”
hurts so bad to feel those tears roll down my chin
Why would you do this…I loved you Tino (my cusions name)
Why would anyone take there own breath away
All the violence in the world is causing death anyways
But hey......//
That’s life right?? That’s family life
People smoke crack everynight
Parents…drink and argue.......every night
Loved ones......take there own lives….EVERY NIGHT//



Rate 1-10 please and um yeah just rate it lol....

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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #1 on: May 01, 2002, 02:38:15 PM »
some real ill shit, from tha heart.....

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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #2 on: May 01, 2002, 02:44:22 PM »
nice, lay off the color shit tho, makes it hard to read, i dont rate rhymes but 6.8

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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #3 on: May 01, 2002, 03:03:06 PM »
real tight shit, keep spittin. 7.5
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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #4 on: May 01, 2002, 03:04:19 PM »
::) Fine I'll lay offffff da color nigga damn is this better? Picky niggaz theses days damn lol jk
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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #5 on: May 12, 2002, 12:03:02 AM »
i think my reply to this post got edited? why??? peace-Tanjint
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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #6 on: May 14, 2002, 02:38:55 PM »
Ill give it a 3/10..hella forced.
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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #7 on: May 14, 2002, 02:42:42 PM »
id rather not read that yellow shit, it hurts my eyes, looks like one of the smilies took a piss on it
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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #8 on: May 14, 2002, 04:12:29 PM »
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id rather not read that yellow shit, it hurts my eyes, looks like one of the smilies took a piss on it



there i fixed it picky bitch lol jk nah but holla aight

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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #9 on: May 17, 2002, 11:33:04 AM »
yo tight shit...i loved tha storytelling yo...

consider starting rappin ....rate 8\10
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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #10 on: May 17, 2002, 11:36:10 AM »
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yo tight shit...i loved tha storytelling yo...

consider starting rappin ....rate 8\10


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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #11 on: May 17, 2002, 06:28:54 PM »
yo why was i edited? I'm with king suge on this...good content but weak rhyme structure,wordplay and mediocre rhythm,peace-Tanjint
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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #12 on: May 17, 2002, 07:13:59 PM »
Nice piece, girl. That was real and from the heart, I wish I could do shit like that. Me, I've basically concluded that I'm a battle rapper and I can't do much more than "beating-chest" shit. Whenever I try to do shit that's deep (see: "Nick of Time - 'Faust Us'") it comes-off lame. Anyway, I gotta give props where they're due. This one gets you a solid 7.6/10 in my book (keep in mind that anything over 7 is pretty dope and anything over 8 is excellent). Nice work. :)
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Re: My Life story peeeeeeeeep.......and rate it...
« Reply #13 on: May 19, 2002, 11:05:51 PM »
LMAO at dougg jones. similies took a piss on it HAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAH
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