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any good?
« on: November 25, 2002, 07:39:49 PM »
Poor ever since i was a boy/ma's to broke to buy me a toy/couldnt go to school without gettin ina fight/mostly cuz im white, never right/must be gods never on my side, as through time passes me by, i always cry/then start to realize that i cant escape these lies nor these cries/got to get out of this trailer, to much of a failure, cant find a cure/for this sickness thats overun my life/like a man beating on his wife/cant escape this life/hate being white, it just cant be right/
for no man to live in shame, whos to blame/
has to be this game/
my soulds hellbound, no where to be found, watch my body fall to the ground/
dead now, boxed and crated, encarcerated, watch as all my dream begin to plunder/
as im....buried six feet under
« Last Edit: November 26, 2002, 07:38:03 AM by __kaLipZo__ »
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Re:any good?
« Reply #1 on: November 25, 2002, 08:14:23 PM »
so heh..im kinda new, tell me what ya think, honest, what i need....hollla
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Re:any good?
« Reply #2 on: November 26, 2002, 09:22:45 AM »
Err. it was pretty heartfelt, but rudimentary with it.  You need to work on expanding your wordplay, and chopping the flow too.  Kinda sounded like something Melachi the Nutcracker would spit (dunno whether that's a compliment or not???)

Anyway, WTF do I know, I'm just a fukking newbie!
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Re:any good?
« Reply #3 on: November 26, 2002, 02:04:49 PM »
to basic.
 

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Re:any good?
« Reply #4 on: November 26, 2002, 02:35:52 PM »
Nice flow homie...
your wordz can be felt, that is all that matter's.
Fuck all the acid spitter's & head chopper's in this forum, that battle shitt is dead.
keep it real and the real will recongnise.

Basic is Battle rhymes ImO.....shitt is an excuse to say nothin'.....homie.
Although some of the netcee's in this spot live & die on that which is dope as well...just a baseball rhyme once in a while...nahh mean "Change-up"

Aiight...lookin' foward to another.
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« Last Edit: November 26, 2002, 02:39:40 PM by Hatesrats »