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The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« on: July 25, 2010, 02:56:28 PM »
look'n for some honest feedbacc on this one cause i feel a certain way about it  :-\
http://www.zshare.net/audio/88861822371cd287/
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most of y'all ain't never heard of me before
because i'm underground,& not very pop-u-lore/
yet,when i get to spit'n fans get to aww shit'n,
head bob'n admitting that with my shit they smitten/
i put it down and bull's eye the target
word of mouth spreads round through-out all markets/
heads who wasn't ready ears are now open
don't have a album out, yet i'm who, they quote'n,/
i'm nice with it, the fans co sign
they bacc burner their yesterday fav's in no time/
mc's get to changing they styles and they flow up,
& they rhymes are sounding similar to mines,/
& since my dicc, it now weighs a ton,
i got a shot at going gold or pla-tin-um/
i'm just speaking bout the fresh mc's with a buzz,
and y'all know that i'm one of them, be-cause/

everybody keep telling me the whole world's braillin me
from the moment they checc'd checc'd out my melody/
others might be fly,but i am fly-er
you serching for that new i'm it's su-pli-er/ 2x

i "teach kids the fundamentals of ballin" like "tom emansky"
with "game so major" that it's "endorsed by playas"/
& i don't hate on other cats brag'n bout they wealth
when i'm jaccie chan with it equal, i "stunt myself"/
i go ham not thinking bout no prices
my team don't either, we tricc off on our vices/
& my equals spend big chipper jones on pot,
that's why they stay puff'n on "trees" the size of "stanford's mascot"/
& yo when i got a girl she wants for nada hit her off with
prada & what i strap with a magnum makes her cum alotta/
just give me my space & stay off my case
when, doing my job and satisfy when you kneel & bob/
and you got me,cause it vouches more then words
ask actresses who sat on casting couches/
& whats worse, i love the art more then the
commerse,except in this here verse no lie &

everybody keep telling me the whole world's braillin me
from the moment they checc'd checc'd out my melody/
others might be fly,but i am fly-er
you serching for that new i'm it's su-pli-er/ 2x

was a b-boy before i ever touched a mic
was tag'n prece 1er before i rocc'd it right/
was nice on it though before i touched the "tables"
mc dismantling before i was pan-han-doel'n/
& man enough to "lead" a squad, all on my own
no coward here "running for help leaving my home"/
i like comp, muthafucc a "team up"
put cream up i'll beat you and the squad you "dream" up/
collide against those they say i'm not better then
i ride and beat foes & those thoughts they have never again/
fairweather fans,now have a change of plans,
& like "beddoe" i recognize & "take a dive"/
i'm the shit but right now i don't need the flies,
on me planting seeds to feed and give em new lives/
i understand why they wanna bill walton
but those ain't real i just chunk em the duece and keep walkin/

everybody keep telling me the whole world's braillin me
from the moment they checc'd checc'd out my melody/
others might be fly,but i am fly-er
you serching for that new i'm it's su-pli-er/ 2x

replies are greatly appreciated yell :argue: :baseballbat: :oi:  yell
« Last Edit: April 10, 2011, 09:46:06 PM by BOX5 the best poster on this site yell »
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #1 on: July 25, 2010, 04:29:46 PM »
I think this is dope, BOX.

I would change a few words on the hook just so it sounds better though.

everybody been telling me the whole world's braillin me
from the moment they checc'd checc'd out my melody/
others might be fly,but i am fly-er
you lookin for that new shit, i'm yo su-pli-er/ 2x

That to me sounds like it flows better imo.
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #2 on: July 25, 2010, 06:54:30 PM »
I think this is dope, BOX.

I would change a few words on the hook just so it sounds better though.

everybody been telling me the whole world's braillin me
from the moment they checc'd checc'd out my melody/
others might be fly,but i am fly-er
you lookin for that new shit, i'm yo su-pli-er/ 2x

That to me sounds like it flows better imo.

good looking out my equal, i tend to write shit sometime that i really don't care to much about
and this was one of those times (that damn first verse to me is  :-X got to keep it networth haha

and it's funny that you say that about the hook,cause i had something similar but it doesn't go
with the beat the way i'm saying it yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #3 on: July 25, 2010, 09:41:10 PM »
Add scratches to the hook from "Check Out My Melody" where you said "checc'd out my melody" instead of spittin it...That'd make it sound better IMO. Kinda how Premier does it. Plus it'd be an homage to the old school.

Also, I think the hook is long a bit...try this:

everybody tellin me the whole world's braillin me
from the moment that they/*sample* *scratches*
others might be fly,but i am fly-er
you lookin for that new shit, i'm yo su-pli-er/ 2x

The first verse is actually dope, but the rhyme is off a bit I think, what about this?

most of y'all ain't never heard of me before
because i'm underground,& I only sell at the mom & pop stores/
yet,when i get to spit'n fans get to aww shit'n,
head bob'n, admittin' that they smitten/wit my shit cause
i put it down and bull's eye the target
word of mouth spreadin' round through-out all markets/
every day I got new fans bumpin tracks of mine tho knowin'
I don't have a album out but i'm who, they quote'n,/
i'm nice with it, fans co signin
they bacc burner their yesterday fav's in no time/
mc's changin they style and they flow up,
& they rhymes soundin' similar to mines,/
& since my dicc now weighs a ton,
i got a shot at going gold or pla-tin-um/
i'm just speaking bout the fresh mc's with a buzz,
and y'all know that i'm one of them, be-cause/
« Last Edit: July 25, 2010, 09:44:34 PM by Sami »
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #4 on: July 26, 2010, 01:45:07 PM »
Add scratches to the hook from "Check Out My Melody" where you said "checc'd out my melody" instead of spittin it...That'd make it sound better IMO. Kinda how Premier does it. Plus it'd be an homage to the old school.

Also, I think the hook is long a bit...try this:

everybody tellin me the whole world's braillin me
from the moment that they/*sample* *scratches*
others might be fly,but i am fly-er
you lookin for that new shit, i'm yo su-pli-er/ 2x

The first verse is actually dope, but the rhyme is off a bit I think, what about this?

most of y'all ain't never heard of me before
because i'm underground,& I only sell at the mom & pop stores/
yet,when i get to spit'n fans get to aww shit'n,
head bob'n, admittin' that they smitten/wit my shit cause
i put it down and bull's eye the target
word of mouth spreadin' round through-out all markets/
every day I got new fans bumpin tracks of mine tho knowin'
I don't have a album out but i'm who, they quote'n,/
i'm nice with it, fans co signin
they bacc burner their yesterday fav's in no time/
mc's changin they style and they flow up,
& they rhymes soundin' similar to mines,/
& since my dicc now weighs a ton,
i got a shot at going gold or pla-tin-um/
i'm just speaking bout the fresh mc's with a buzz,
and y'all know that i'm one of them, be-cause/


crazy about the checc out my melody part cause that's what i want to put in there haha reading my mind haha
i got to get it to sound right when it's in there and how much it's gonna cost,if it ain't to my liking i'm a just say it
people will be surprised how much some want for publishing these days yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #5 on: July 26, 2010, 01:53:22 PM »
Damn, you'd think they'd love being remembered at all. LOL
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #6 on: July 27, 2010, 01:06:45 PM »
they love that checc more then being remembered hahahaha, but being fucc'd outta chipper jones in the past or paying hella child support will make you want 100% publishing i guess yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #7 on: July 27, 2010, 02:38:55 PM »
I suppose that's true, especially considering Ra sold only like 20 copies on his last album.

Hey BOX, check out that track I posted here: http://www.zshare.net/audio/78679015170bb4e2/ I need some feedback.
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #8 on: July 28, 2010, 11:32:26 PM »
dope shit man. record it
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i once saw a pterdactyl fuck a bitch
eat a bowl these bitch gobbling dick
hoes forgot to eat a dick a shut the fuck up
roll through crenshaw on my pterdactyl like what up!
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« Reply #9 on: July 29, 2010, 07:35:30 PM »
I suppose that's true, especially considering Ra sold only like 20 copies on his last album.

Hey BOX, check out that track I posted here: http://www.zshare.net/audio/78679015170bb4e2/ I need some feedback.

ay that beat sound ight,it sounds like some of roy ayers stuff,digging it, i want to hear the finish product of it yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #10 on: July 29, 2010, 07:38:45 PM »
dope shit my equal yell  8)
 

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« Reply #11 on: July 29, 2010, 07:57:56 PM »
dope shit man. record it

good looking out my equal i'm a knocc it out soon and trying to see if i'm gonna keep it as well yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #12 on: July 29, 2010, 07:59:01 PM »
dope shit my equal yell  8)
much respect and thanks for checc'n it out my equal appreciate it yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #13 on: July 29, 2010, 10:16:48 PM »
I'll finish it and you can have it for free to use for whatever since you were my only feedback...Props dude.

PS. I *would* say "yell", but too many people stealin' ya slang. :D  8)
 

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« Reply #14 on: July 29, 2010, 11:07:58 PM »
full instrumental is here, 1 min 19 seconds....

http://www.zshare.net/audio/78823234a22e2782/

It's mixed, but I can give you the mixer tracks and you could mix it if my mixing sucks.
 

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« Reply #15 on: July 30, 2010, 01:23:38 PM »
I'll finish it and you can have it for free to use for whatever since you were my only feedback...Props dude.

PS. I *would* say "yell", but too many people stealin' ya slang. :D  8)
it's all good, as long as equals know who came up with it and give props yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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« Reply #16 on: July 30, 2010, 01:26:38 PM »
full instrumental is here, 1 min 19 seconds....

http://www.zshare.net/audio/78823234a22e2782/

It's mixed, but I can give you the mixer tracks and you could mix it if my mixing sucks.
is it a sample or is all original yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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« Reply #17 on: July 30, 2010, 03:11:28 PM »
alll original, with bootleg vsts
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #18 on: August 03, 2010, 04:09:32 AM »
I made a new beat just for this track. Can I email it to you, BOX?
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #19 on: August 03, 2010, 02:53:54 PM »
got to get my comp working right again yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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Re: The Whole World's Braille'n Me
« Reply #20 on: April 10, 2011, 09:47:43 PM »
up'n you bastards i know it's been longer then more then 120 days,unless you're sure you want to reply hahaha if i didnt i wouldn't be up'n this bitch with some audio muthafucca hahahaha yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp
 

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« Reply #21 on: April 12, 2011, 04:17:06 PM »
Dope. Props BOX...
 

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« Reply #22 on: April 21, 2011, 10:43:41 PM »
good looking out glad you appreciated it sami yell
got a good woman at home,& this broad i smashed be-foe
but in my dome i'm think'n will it be good as be-foe
ring finger says, to don't pursue it,the "k-9" in me says
"ain't-nothing-to-it, but-to-do-it"/
but if we bang and i get caught OH-BOY-YA!/
i pray to god the wife don't get kelis or elin's lawyer
www.myspace.com/panhandoelrcorp