Author Topic: another keystyle (Read 145 times)

abstruse · « **on:** March 09, 2003, 04:24:25 PM »

mah bad about it bein small and stuff whatever, gimme feedback.

ya dont *realize* whos who till real shit-goes-down /
*sterilize* ya own mind till ya alone, wit no one around /
so how we truely know when a friendships-been-found /
unable to *prophecise* the period when friends-become-unbound /
well that days here, dont come within inch, nevah stand near /
the brother-love we had, has now dissapeared /
we was close *spiritually*, finishin eachothers sentence /
now to know *mentally*, that you was all pretense /
hard to think mah beloved-brother /
is now my hated-*enemy* /

|JEM|ILL| · « **Reply #1 on:** March 09, 2003, 05:44:33 PM »

horrible...no flow...you need work kid.

·SiNiStEr· · « **Reply #2 on:** March 09, 2003, 05:51:13 PM »

not many multis, extremely hard to understand, ya had no title and u didnt get a point across.
u have potential just put yo shit together and get a new vocabulary.