Rhyme Scheme Keystyle...

[|JEM|ILL|]

The Founder-of-ill Is here and hes added power-to-will...
If this was presently the future Id be ahead of my time-still...
My lines-real...soothin ya mind-till its elevated-past-expansions...
A vast-ransom is paid for captives of rentivated-fast-rap-passion...
Philosophically written...my tomes are sitten in Halls-of-Fame...
Wack acts on stage get engulfed in balls-of-flame...
Ive mauled-ya-name... youve falled-from-fame...
It aint over but I reset because yall've lost-the-game...
But I return with hate...Took kids and called-the-shots...
Yelled head..they skulls splatter, bralwin-with-glocks..
Yet a peaceful being lets go... Stallin-his-walks...
Steps outta pace... slowed down.. Fallen-to-rocks...
Back again, Standin and speedin-to-stardom...
All of his misfortune and bleedin-has-hardened...
My levels elevate with each-line, the pen-explodes...
When-he-knows hes better he states you cant reach-mine...
His scents-implode, disappearin from-existence, good-ridence...
You should-listen...he battles deadly with venomous insults and disses...

[LyRiCaL_G]

thats a  pretty dope verse, wasnt feelin the start but it got stronga as it went on and it flowed real dope

peace

[|JEM|ILL|]

it was a ten min keystyl i did to work on my rhyme scheme..

[Inspectah]

This was a good verse, i see that your flow is based apon multis which most of the emcees here nowadays use, not all of em do, but i and some others do.. it was a nice flow, liked the verse.. felt it so keep shit up!

Could i have some feedback on ma keystyles, 'Ghetto Love' and 'Only Skin Deep' coz like i feel im writing to myself!

Thanx

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