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AdamX aka Xplicit

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Peep this... crits welcome
« on: June 01, 2003, 05:16:18 AM »
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Mystery Thrill Killer, Mister Un-deni-able spine chiller,
History's un-iden-tifi-able time-line filler, no minds iller,
sublime crimes de-signed to keep 'em guessin n stressin
confessions expressin my directive, addressin da press'n
detectives to my invective objectives, high level selectivity
while their subjective linear perspective is ineffective to see
connections between me and mine, they stay two steps behind
while I'm defined by the signs in the sky, monsta-Kodiak mind
aligned w/ the stars and planets, assign panic, Zodiac mechanic
frantic addicts misunderstand it as satanic, so the act's galvanic
& peaks your curiosity, What kinda man can plan such ferocity?
Can perform such atrocity with such monstrocity and animosity?
You couldn't possibly, reach the escape velocity of my thirsts-
Gravity, immersed in the worst depravity, 1st in savagery, bursts
Rapidly dispersed to inflict death sentences, for my neo genesis
To create a collective of afterlife apprentices' the main emphasis
The soul gatherer...security shatterer, small town girl flatterer,
Batter her and then splatter her grey matter with a .22 caliber
Your caliper couldn't gauge the diameter of my scope
and can't cope with thickness of the rope around your throat
that chokes off your hopes and recedes with your last breath
I leave a note in the abscess of ya chest to confess like MacBeth
no return address just a cipher of madness, to incite hyper sadness
write in a lattice, frame ladders, I climbed to the heights of badness
and live on in infamy, remain to this day an unknown entity
eluded the sentries who sent for me, still maintains essentially
the top post, most wanted:...the criminal mind of the century
« Last Edit: June 01, 2003, 05:19:33 AM by AdamX aka Xplicit »
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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #1 on: June 01, 2003, 06:35:27 AM »
complicated as fuck, fucking tongue twista shit. dopeness
Coz you see at the age of birth, we was contaminated with the caucasions curse/
I dont know what came first, the pententiary or the purse/
But I aint into that crap, I'd rather lay back and start working on my raps/
While you niggas stay strapped, with a hoe on your lap, with a dirty puss and crack/
While I stay intact with my people, and carry the mic which is lethal/
 

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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #2 on: June 01, 2003, 06:52:16 AM »
dam yer, it was fucking dope tho, the lines we dope as fuck.  U cud be a dope battler if you cud do that in all your rhymes, you wud crush most of the people here.  keep spitting gangsta.
 

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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #3 on: June 01, 2003, 08:30:45 AM »
dope as fuck
 

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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #4 on: June 01, 2003, 09:33:38 AM »
haha yes adam show this fuckaz wassup wit VDK.....
 

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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #5 on: June 01, 2003, 10:38:32 AM »
dam yer, it was fucking dope tho, the lines we dope as fuck.  U cud be a dope battler if you cud do that in all your rhymes, you wud crush most of the people here.  keep spitting gangsta.

bez i dont see you battlin? dont be talkin that mess..

anyway good shit adam.. i like the rhyme scheme.. dope shit
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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #6 on: June 01, 2003, 09:23:56 PM »
oh hey adam that's sum dope shit u dropped ....oh i'm aslo silah if remember


 

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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #7 on: June 02, 2003, 04:02:59 AM »
Thank for the crit yall, it's appreciated.
Wasup Aslo? Don't tell me you ain't gonna be posting on the Dre board no mo... I ain't seein you there.
Anyhow, thanks for the propz yall...
And Bez, bra i do battle... Kinda busy this week but i'll get to it.
Peace
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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #8 on: June 02, 2003, 04:35:19 AM »
well i can't access the dre board no more ,for 2 reasons:
i wrote me e-mail wrong when i registered as aslo silah ,then i registered as ecks-kaliber (or somethin) a username i never used so now i've forgotten my password

the other reason is the dr dre seems to have crashed or something..


 

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« Reply #9 on: June 03, 2003, 01:45:52 PM »
Like i said on the dre board... dope as fuck. You should call it "return of the zodiac"
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You only call her a bitch cause she won't let you in that pussy
Maybe she felt you didn't share any similar interests
Or Maybe you're an asshole who couldnt sweet talk a princess.
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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #10 on: June 03, 2003, 02:38:14 PM »
one small comment: this would b super rediculous if it was measured n2 bars correctly cuz in its present state i dont know how u would spit it. but i was feelin it a lot. do u rhyme offline? if so do u have audio?

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« Reply #11 on: June 03, 2003, 04:45:50 PM »
Aslo, yeah it was down for a bit but it's back again

Sup Ill? Yeah that's suitable, "Return Of The Zodiac" it is...

Gyrl1da.. Yeah I spit offline, I battle every friday night.. and cyphers are my everyday life. As for audios, my computer at home is too piss poor to record anything on, i got nothin on it, most of my niggaz don't got computers and i can't afford studio time..  I guess i ain't ever taken my shit seriously enough to go out and record summin. I should sometime soon...
Thanks for the love..

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Re:Peep this... crits welcome
« Reply #12 on: June 03, 2003, 11:48:31 PM »
some really complex shit.. like tounge twistin.. It would sound dope as fuck as an auido..
 

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« Reply #13 on: June 04, 2003, 04:57:57 AM »
uppin for mo feedback for my boy....
 

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« Reply #14 on: June 04, 2003, 06:04:29 AM »
i still can't access the dre board