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Check it.
« on: June 02, 2003, 09:11:24 PM »
[Chorus]
i never understood how freedom could be such a wealth //
you gave me the power to express how i felt //
when i was down you were my lifting belt //
so everytime i'm in trouble i seek you for help //


[Verse 1]
when i was just a little kid //
i was takin servere  whippins //
nevah seemed to know what i did //
parents just nevah revered to listen //
spent plenty nights cryin myself to sleep //
i refrained the wealth to speak //
remembering once a child //
feeling i was unapart of somethin //
my folks was blunt to smile //
i was lost my thoughts mumbling //
everyday stumbling just to get through //
but then the day came i met you //
held you in my hand n embraced-you //
nevah stopped when i was told to put a fork-in-it //
cuz every second with you was fortunate //
said i lacked intellect to attend college //
but with you was the only time i kicked knowledge //

[Verse 2]
when i'm with you i'm distinct //
i break the mold of simplicity //
let go of everythin that i think //
and ya help me see what i need to be //
i flashback to the times i feared //
looking at myself in the mirror //
but then an illusion appeared //
of me rising through the atmosphere //
transmitting electrical waves //
performin in specticle plays //
under diverse retinal rays //
and fans coming expectin to pay //
but it was free //
cuz i wasn't economically ruptured //
i did it for the love of the culture //
and prey on open sessions like a vulture //

[Verse 3]
every scream was an internal needle //
felt like being infested with measles //
tried to take a stand, but i was feeble //
but when i pick you up its seems //
that i'm two different people //
alongside you nothings wrong with it //
never look back i'm always confident //
i seen a new road and i saught it //
you were with me through everystep //
right inside of my pocket //
but with everyglance i was enticed //
since the time you were named a mic //
we caused chaos and stirred up fights //
observed things i couldn't visualize //
couldnt tell what was correct in my minds-eye //
and split personalities is what i feel inside //
so i await the day thye both collide //


^ Some of those are recycled lines and since I never truely finished anything with them I incorporated them with this.


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« Reply #1 on: June 03, 2003, 02:57:17 PM »
lemme break somethin down 4 ya real quick... most of the shit rappers say is recycled. they come upwit stuff constantly and when the time calls 4 it, they go 2 the memory banks and pull out some lines they've filed away. theresd nothin wrong with breathin some new life n2 an old verse either. i liked this post a lot and i think ur a good writer. keep it up!  ;D
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« Reply #2 on: June 03, 2003, 07:03:22 PM »
I liked it man, little different than your usual style, I noticed, but still flowed well.  I especially liked the weight belt meta, I'm a lifter myself. ;)  Real honest piece from the heart man, nice.

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« Reply #3 on: June 03, 2003, 11:10:54 PM »
 :'( hehehe, nah man it was heartfelt I liked it.
 

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« Reply #4 on: June 03, 2003, 11:34:33 PM »
I liked it man, little different than your usual style, I noticed, but still flowed well.