I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)

[T.J.]

i dont give a fuck if u dont feel this..... just lettin shit out.... wrote it at 3am last nite



What the fuk is going on, i cant go to sleep
too many thoughts running through my mind, i cant go to sleep
depression's overcome me, is life really worth living?
Constant conflict of emotions, do i deserve what i was given?
i think so, my kind of attitude deserves no gratitude
after all the oppurtunities youve given me, god why am i still mad at you?
i need to take advantage of everything that comes my way
life aint no joke, fuck the bud smoke, u gotta work hard day by day
after these years of laziness, craziness and not givin a fuck
is it too late to climb out of this abyss in which i am stuck?
day by day i dug myself deeper, look at the end result
a 15 year old on the verge of failure, say it, its not an insult
as of this day i vow to turn my life around in a flash
work harder for my future stability; it all comes down to the cash
show more self-respect, end this not givin a fuck mentality
whole of my life i spent in dreamworld, time to snap back to reality


its weird what you write when u cant sleep

[da_notorious_mack]

i was feelin this...nice shit...

[bez]

dam man I really really really felt it.

Hope you dont take offense to this but I think your rhymin style in that rhyme was kind of simliar to mine.  it flowed well and made sense and was good to read.

I have always had problems sleeping and it is quite wierd the rhymes you can write when your suppose to be asleep.  Crazy.  Good shit tho mate.

[·SiNiStEr·]

^ ditto..

[T.J.]

dam man I really really really felt it.

Hope you dont take offense to this but I think your rhymin style in that rhyme was kind of simliar to mine.  it flowed well and made sense and was good to read.

I have always had problems sleeping and it is quite wierd the rhymes you can write when your suppose to be asleep.  Crazy.  Good shit tho mate.

hehe... yeh i just read it when i was out of my writing zone and i noticed it was kinda similar to the shit you write.... which is a good thing right??
hopefully something else comes up in my head 2nite and i write something else.

thx for the feedback, more if possible

[Reef]

Nice shit.. I liked the whole idea of it man

[ZILLA THA GOODFELLA]

feel that shit 151%

[T.J.]

uppin