*TT* Round I: Mack VS Vito *MACK WINS*

[|JEM|ILL|]

Round 1

Welcome to Round 1...

Rulez... Violation of any of the rules will result in Disqualification...
15 lines minimum
30 lines maximum
No Biting
No Recycling
No Beefing within official battle threads
No Feeding off anyone's verse
No Modifying Verse after due date
Come Ill

Due : August 1st 10:00 PM Eastern Time

If there is a valid reason why you cant have your verse posted by the due date please reach me by email or AIM...

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Topic

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1: Your lookin in a Magazine (Tell what 'zine), when all of a sudden, your adventure begins on the pages of the magazine... Tell about your journey through the pages of the magazine.

[da_notorious_mack]

"Flip back" to that stage,when they said "i lack in content"..
but my flow god sent,1st page,im interviewin backstage..castin comments..
the dancin commence,and im spinnin the decks,winnin respect..
spinnin vinyls,real old school shit,the "unsigned" hype,im still hea ta let..
now im on my peeps block,the mood hits me,i begin to beatbox..
make these bitches knees knock..
an italian stepped up,looked um straight on,i cus i hate glancin..
the homie offered me a battle breakdancin..now i hate dancin..
but the mood hit me,i started to move quickly..
his lame comeback was booed swifty...but ay who flipped me..
it 20 years on,"commercials" everywhere an it a sin to me..
that all i see now in the pages of my like is the hip pop industry..
why you do that,where the similes the tight metaphores..
i aint wanna see cacausian hatin wit a white editor..
ever  since the benzino incident,all the mag do is front more..
wanna know what mag i was writin bout,check this months source..

[vitodeluca]

drippin' water, screams, the sound of barbara walters, on the TV, tryin to explain me,
I got a perodical in my hands, periodically explainin our plans, black pants, black shirt and trenchcoat,
coated with red, I lie on my steel framed bed, grandiose ideas in my head as I see the headings
the cover covering me and the rest of the so called outsiders, the rejects, you might expect
me to come from a broken home, let it go, you can look but you can't know what really goes on
he's crazy, demented, and so on, it's so wrong to say a violent song or videogame contributed to my fame,
try goin' to high school everyday these days, see if you don't go insane,
want to grab a M-16 and do some ethnic cleansing
of course this journalist will paint me as a terrorist, good can't exist juxapositioned against nothin
so I'll keep bein' willin to keep killin, sayin marilyn had a hand in my reckless abandon,
stand in my shoes before you believe the news, Page 2, I'm bigger than all you,
see the seething hatred, see the red I saw
when these hee haw popular jocks and bitches degraded me since the 9th grade,
now I feel nothing but pride how my shotgun sprayed and layed them down in their graves,
look at the depraved face they gave, look where I sit today, isolate me from the general populace,
my popularity on the cell block is greater than the jocks I put in a box,
 watch me on Mike Wallace, try to understand the death that came at my hands,
look at my fans, I get letters everyday, my light they can't take away, I'm a star lighting up this dark place,
I'm on the cover of newsweek today, give me a Nine, I'm a 10, give me a chance I'd do it again...

One of the trench coat mafia readin' about himself in newsweek while he's in prison...thought it'd be an interesting thought experiment.

[|JEM|ILL|]

eh....

Damn...Yall finna make shit hard on me...

Mack: Played topic, could have been more creative...But the flow and multies were Some of the best I've seen here!...Rhyme scheme complex as hell. You touched on some things i haven't read before. Which helped in a Major way...

Straight Illness
it 20 years on,"commercials" everywhere an it a sin to me..
that all i see now in the pages of my like is the hip pop industry..
why you do that,where the similes the tight metaphores..
i aint wanna see cacausian hatin wit a white editor..

Vito: Vito, Vito, Vito... Personally i feel it as a reflexion of columbine actually...and yes thats played some of the lines were played badly, some of them it was like almost that you were jus flippin what i heard someone say before..Not accusin you of biting of course...Flow was choppy...multies non existant, BUT the verse was very complex in vocab such and such...deep shit...And hella nice imagery...

Hmmm...Disturbingly Sic...
so I'll keep bein' willin to keep killin, sayin marilyn had a hand in my reckless abandon,
stand in my shoes before you believe the news, Page 2, I'm bigger than all you,

Flow: Mack Easily
Complexity: Vito
Originality: Got to give this to Mack...I've heard Vito's topic content from Em, and other cats...
Deepness: Vito
Reflective:Mack
Imagery:Vito

OY...

Ratings...

Mack: 5.7

Vito: 5.0

WINNER: MACK... Nice Shit Both Of Yall...Made Me Have To Reread Ya Shit...

[vitodeluca]

Allright, normally I'm cool with votes, but I want to make a couple points...first while eminem commented on columbine it was limited to like 2 lines in one song or something, and as far as me usin' recycled lines, I don't really think so but if that's what you say than that's cool.  As far as flow goes, I thought it was on point, but the way it was written i guess it's hard to see.  Anyhow, that my second loss to Mack it 2 days, FUCK!!  Oh well.

[|JEM|ILL|]

Allright, normally I'm cool with votes, but I want to make a couple points...first while eminem commented on columbine it was limited to like 2 lines in one song or something, and as far as me usin' recycled lines, I don't really think so but if that's what you say than that's cool.  As far as flow goes, I thought it was on point, but the way it was written i guess it's hard to see.  Anyhow, that my second loss to Mack it 2 days, FUCK!!  Oh well.

Didn't say you recycled lines...and also not just eminem said something like that. Marlyn did (word...) Nas, Fat Joe, and System of a Down