*TT* Semi's...Owen VS Mack MACK WINS

[|JEM|ILL|]

Same rulez from round 1...Due this Sunday

Cept' 40 line Max...

Topic

Before you lays a time machine, but you may only use it once and change only a single event...Explain what time era you go to and what event you change.

[da_notorious_mack]

A swirlin vortex emerges forward..
this my last moment in this era for good?..
cus if it only operates once,this takes front..
but i gotta go back in time,16 yrs 8 monthes..
i jump through the portal,to the abnormal..
but i act cordial,dressed to kill,black formal..
wear,as i go to a glitzy bash,fulla tipsy cats..
downin whisky caps,know Mack spit the facts..
"but i didnt come to have fun,far from it..
nah honest,jumped thru a time machine on narcotics"..
bitches think it a chat up line..please jus back off dime..
you kiddin fa sure if you think Mack got time..
ima man on a mission,ran ta the kitchen..
got a meat cleaver,i cant stand all the friction..
ran up stairs,the man up stairs,id he hadda care..
fa me,would stopped me,even my mans are scared..
fa me,back to the story,even if yall be Mack this gory..
the room was on i cant recap what storey..
regardless,two sexual partners,sharin a dark kiss..
i lunged with the cleaver,show this ho where his heart is..
threw the bitch out the window,had a twitch off the endo..
ginuwine an twista style,thinkin is this the end yo..
looked down at the male bleedin,i jus blazed his health..
my hands become transparent,ive jus erased myself..
so before i go to hell,an take a long plunge in lava..
ill tell you why i went back..to kill my momz an father..
as the earth rips in two..i stare at his carcass..
in the war of my troubled mindstate i made mysell a matyr..


i dont usually write shit like that sooooo feedback always appreciated...

[bez]

A swirlin vortex emerges forward..
this my last moment in this era for good?..
cus if it only operates once,this takes front..
but i gotta go back in time,16 yrs 8 monthes..
i jump through the portal,to the abnormal..
but i act cordial,dressed to kill,black formal..
wear,as i go to a glitzy bash,fulla tipsy cats..
downin whisky caps,know Mack spit the facts..
"but i didnt come to have fun,far from it..
nah honest,jumped thru a time machine on narcotics"..
bitches think it a chat up line..please jus back off dime..
you kiddin fa sure if you think Mack got time..
ima man on a mission,ran ta the kitchen..
got a meat cleaver,i cant stand all the friction..
ran up stairs,the man up stairs,id he hadda care..
fa me,would stopped me,even my mans are scared..
fa me,back to the story,even if yall be Mack this gory..
the room was on i cant recap what storey..
regardless,two sexual partners,sharin a dark kiss..
i lunged with the cleaver,show this ho where his heart is..
threw the bitch out the window,had a twitch off the endo..
ginuwine an twista style,thinkin is this the end yo..
looked down at the male bleedin,i jus blazed his health..
my hands become transparent,ive jus erased myself..
so before i go to hell,an take a long plunge in lava..
ill tell you why i went back..to kill my momz an father..
as the earth rips in two..i stare at his carcass..
in the war of my troubled mindstate i made mysell a matyr..


i dont usually write shit like that sooooo feedback always appreciated...

HOLYYYYYYYY SHIT.  I didnt expect that ending at all, throughtout the verse I was like who the fucks he gone back to kill.............for some reasons I was picturin the end scene from scarface, dont ask me why. lol........that was dope tho Mack, man when I say your mother and father I literally went dammmmmmmm.  Good shit.

[Skindiana bon3z]

(from Owen)

Heard of cause and effect? That’s the result should I elect
To change time, yeah, I know this is only a rhyme,
But the internet’s a tool, so I’m going to treat like it’s as lethal as strychnine.
Tock, tick, fourth line, is the choice still mine? Maybe
Fate controls life, so it wouldn’t matter if I used the knife,
Cause someone else would, so should I bother?
Thought hover, perhaps I could change history,
Or Go Back To The Future, reform Hooter’s into a debate club ,
Replace subs with caviar, but all that might mar
The stream of time (barring the fact this is asinine),
And that sub might not choke the next Hitler,
Damn! I broke the picture, now Hitler bans rap, ‘loc’,
Then I could have never reflected on changing textbooks,
That’s cause and effect, see, time’s like nets and hooks,
It catches up with you, either Hitler happens or not,
Nothing I can do, does it matter JFK shot himself
From the grassy knoll? Without time travellers, he would
Have fallen that day anyway, do I hear you say
“Damn! That’s gay!”? That’s as may be, but I’m
Going to ignore the time machine, hang with my lady,
Live in the here and now, that much is clear, but how?
Jemuel’s ordered me to use the machine, time will tell
If U stay clean, I’m switching to determined mode,
Before metaphysics makes my head explode…

[|JEM|ILL|]

Jesus...Nice Shit Both Of Yall...

Mack: Flow was straight flawless, and rhymescheme made up for any lose of vocabulary because each word could slip off your tongue so good if you say that shit aloud. Content...Damn blew me away actually your pretty good. Imagery... Was okay you could have added a couple more definative words but o well it was still pretty good. End...Nice twist would have never suspected you to be killing your parents...lol that was good...

Rating
7.2

Owen/Krimson: Wow...Your flow wasn't as great as it could have been, but you made up for flow and multiz with your seemless rhyme scheme and crazy vocab you dished, the content was pretty good, you choose not to go into the machine because of cause and effect and explained several examples of what might happen, Neh? And that wasn't against the topic so you get away with it. The end I was hope for somethin crazy but didn't get it, but your ending was average...

Rating
5.6

Complexity:Owen
Flow:Mack
Content:Mack
Wow:Mack

Vote Goes To MACK...

Hit me up Owen, maybe we can collab some time..