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'...left on pause, now back playing tha' game!'
« on: October 16, 2003, 10:59:57 AM »
I aint a gangsta, nutting near enough to they wealth//
Altho this typa shit i gots goin' on could damage yo' health//
Typing n not liking, tryna find something better yourself//
Coz im fresh outta the bakery, but im cooking the franchise//
I just sit back, laid back, pic up a portable mic, hand size//
Roll out lyriks all day, from the tip of the tongue//
I aint got a magic stick 50, but certainly can get a girl sprung//
No need for a contest with me, i've already won//
Why should i ave an aire to my thrown, im the only one//
I dont need a follower, one of a kind, not needing a son//
I'll rule my own label, and just represent others//
Im the superier cells of my family, altho i aint got brothers//
I reigned my own era, and made myself a legend//
The only thing holding me down is time, but i dont waste a second//
Freestyle like theirs no tomorow, til the second that i blink//
Shoulda hired me to morse code 'help' so the titanic wouldnt sink//
Also, why waste time beefin', just remain a vegetarian//
If you got nothing to say decent, then be a librarian//
Quiet unless you gotta make a respectful statement//
Half of you peeps just newbies, been given a placement//
But WCC dont need fake ass gangsters, no more vacant//
Making a come back, EMCEE PT, fresh, and pure blatent//

Peace Out! - Just a 5 minute freestyle off tha' dome, straight off on to keyboard! lol... Peace Out!
 

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Re:'...left on pause, now back playing tha' game!'
« Reply #1 on: October 22, 2003, 03:21:27 AM »
*Bump* sup wit da' feedack??

 

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Re:'...left on pause, now back playing tha' game!'
« Reply #2 on: October 22, 2003, 05:25:27 AM »
I kind of like your style, I'd enjoy it better if you got into something meaty and took on a subject.  I like how you say something in one line, and then in the next line either continue talking about it, or say something that relates to the previous line, most of the time people on here just throw random stuff out that rhymes, you took the time to tie yours together.  

For instance, you call somebody a librarian, because it rhymes.  That WOULD be wack, but then in the next sentence, you say "So quiet unless you gotta make a respectful statement" which is the exact attidue librarians have, so you actually turned what would have been a wack rhyme into something intelligent.  
 

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Re:'...left on pause, now back playing tha' game!'
« Reply #3 on: October 23, 2003, 10:21:18 AM »
Thanx 4 da feedback.. i can do alot better.. but i just freestyled anything off my head to see how it rymhed.. my style is so much better, im preparing to battle soon!

Peace!


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