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A verse I wrote
« on: October 21, 2003, 03:47:48 PM »
I just wrote this verse,I'd like you to tell me if you like it.I know it's not the good part of the forum for this,but the one that is,is hardly visited. 8)

I fuck from the behind,wich means I'm a Dogg
She had to be mistaken when she said 'a Cock'
a little stupid but she was a good-looking dushi
I said "If that's the way you wanna talk I'll call you Pussy
She giggled, I was funny she said
In the mean time I though how she'd give Head
Do you want a drink?Yeah that would be nice
And since I'm a cock I've got to ask it trice
Was that wrong?Is that word obsolete?
I'll say twice then,if that's what you need
Back to the story,my dick went elevatory
Stiff,hard,erect,you know,ready for action
But she doesn't have to know that at this intersection
so I cross my legs and sit close to the table
I look like a fag,but at least kept my horse in the stable
She did the same so you can guess what I saw
Perfect circles,firm and lush, I did not see a flaw
"Do you like them?"she giggled,what else could I say,
than: "I do but they'd look even better with the clothes away!"?
"I don't wear that many so I guess you like them"
and the look in her eyes made her look like a fatale femme
Is that femme fatale?sorry,it had to rhyme
And wouldn't you get confused with a bitch that fine?
Once again,back to the story
you shouldn't interrupt me so much,even when you adore me!
As I was getting curious I asked what she wore
she said she only had a dress and a black thong in store!
I usually don't like little to choose from little,but here we got an exception
"Have you got condoms as well? I'm anti-conception"
"Me too,as I like stuff to get in,not to get out"
I don't need to tell you that right then I could give a shout.
Redfaced I saw my chance,so I state:
"What's your state?"
"A little under the weather,it's raining and due to the smog
I can't find the entrance as it's clouded in fog"
Maybe I can find it for you,was the next thing i said
she looked at me mischievous........"You have to wait till the bed"
There was joy and then shock on my face...I had forgotten her name!
To the red of lust now added a red of shame
Minutes later,as I saw her harmonica
I thought "aha!" and remembered it was Zoe a.k.a. Hornica


It's just something that came in mind,so...........
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Re:A verse I wrote
« Reply #1 on: October 21, 2003, 03:52:09 PM »
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Re:A verse I wrote
« Reply #2 on: October 22, 2003, 03:38:56 AM »
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Re:A verse I wrote
« Reply #3 on: October 22, 2003, 06:26:48 AM »
The first few lines or so turned me off, because I'm tired of hearing people rap about their dick.  Look, you're a guy, I'm a guy, we can probably both get all the women we set our mind to, why rap about it?  Start rapping about something with substance and I think you'll show a lot more creativity, and that's when your talent can accurately be judged.  Peace~
 

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Re:A verse I wrote
« Reply #4 on: October 22, 2003, 01:35:09 PM »
The first few lines or so turned me off, because I'm tired of hearing people rap about their dick.  Look, you're a guy, I'm a guy, we can probably both get all the women we set our mind to, why rap about it?  Start rapping about something with substance and I think you'll show a lot more creativity, and that's when your talent can accurately be judged.  Peace~

Lol. Is it because I've pissed you off concerning the space program of the US?
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Re:A verse I wrote
« Reply #5 on: October 22, 2003, 01:51:12 PM »
well, I aint tryna dis you or anything but it was corny. i mean the subject was aight, although played out but it coulda been better.

but jus my opinion
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Re:A verse I wrote
« Reply #6 on: October 22, 2003, 08:56:11 PM »
The first few lines or so turned me off, because I'm tired of hearing people rap about their dick.  Look, you're a guy, I'm a guy, we can probably both get all the women we set our mind to, why rap about it?  Start rapping about something with substance and I think you'll show a lot more creativity, and that's when your talent can accurately be judged.  Peace~

Lol. Is it because I've pissed you off concerning the space program of the US?
Peace :)

Don't flatter yourself.  I have so many people that disagree with me, I don't even know who most of them are.  I don't even recognize you, and even if I did, I don't hold grudges.  I'm just saying my opinion about your rhyme.  'peace~'
 

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Re:A verse I wrote
« Reply #7 on: October 23, 2003, 10:15:00 AM »
i liked it
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