.:Colours:.

[da_notorious_mack]

How you gunna realize i smoke when i hide the dope...
the colours of my sub concsious are like a klaidascope..
so bright an vibrant,so awesome some recollection is due..
red turns to blue..all despite ya set or ya kru...
i aint gettin at you,but youll put ya brotha in tha dirt..
over the colour of a shirt..this shit smotherin tha earth..
its another in the works...at least wit Mack it should...
see colours are indifferent..they can be bad or good..
they can be twisted to their users end..kru's pretend..
it what they rep..but it they way of fittin in...
gettin in...intiations..in this world doctors killin patients..
they should be healing..the forgin of the will is blatant..
my mind still is fragrant..ive learned to rise above it..
you try to see the truth but youre eyes are covered..
me an my homie caught slippin..he french..man bailed...
picture..NATO...Iraq..this happened on a grand scale..
colours of flags..this goes to my brother in baghdad..
or the other who had crack..jus cus it gett'n that bad..
white or black..we all need something we hungry..
get locked if we slang but who get drugs in the country?..
tha man wit a plan fa the order...aint ya man on the corna..
it the man that get us em then leave us to hang fa the slaughter..



weeded...jus on sum bullshit really...tryna get deep...lol

[da_notorious_mack]

llol yeah fuck yall too...

[M Dogg™]

LOL... I didn't even get into the board until now. Nice shit dogg. It's all good.

[bez]

I know what its like to check the board to see if anyone has replied to your rhyme and they aint, fucking sucks nutz.

Good shit mate.  Great flow and shit as per.

[Reef]

nycce man...

[Trauma-san]

Pretty good, you have talent.  I think if you took more time on yourself to delete the redundant and the cliche's it would all work better.  Not hating.


For instance, the first line if you analyze it it becomes obvious that you just wrote that so you could set up the word "Kaliedescope".  It doesn't even go with the rest of it.  

[bez]

Pretty good, you have talent.  I think if you took more time on yourself to delete the redundant and the cliche's it would all work better.  Not hating.


For instance, the first line if you analyze it it becomes obvious that you just wrote that so you could set up the word "Kaliedescope".  It doesn't even go with the rest of it.  

LMAO.  

Mack it was dope, Trauma this is keystyle man not fucking rocket science.  Read the rhyme for what it is and don't actually try and analyze a rhyme because:

    a:  Nobody gives a fuck anyway
    b:  It was a dope rhyme anyway
    c:  Your theories are bullshit

Peace

[Trauma-san]

Just giving creative criticism, you can't take my words from me. I'll say what I want, when I want, wherever I want.  

[da_notorious_mack]

fuck you both wrong...traumas right but he aint linkin the bars together....while i associate activatin ya sub conscious with smokin weed....aint no thang....

[Trauma-san]

^^ That's how you intended it, then, but I didn't catch it that way.  It'd be better if it was obvious what you meant, and didn't need interpretation.  It's all piciune anyways, you're good, I was just trying to find things you could improve on.  The last thing you need is everybody kissing your ass.