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Dub-L

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'So Tired' my rhyme
« on: March 25, 2004, 07:57:52 PM »
So tired of people tell me shit, 'bout some racist or some other//  Some shit about a hater and some shit about a lover//  Idiotic, stupid, nimrodic kids killin' momma they daddy, they sisters they brothers//  Fuck, I'm stuck tryin' to write in a enigmatic attic, full of shit that people used to own, and say they had it//  But I'm chokin' on the stage like fuckin' rabbit//  You statin' the obvious and I wont have it//  Can't have it//  Take a stab at it//  See how far yo' sorry ass can, bitch this rough, this game ain't padded//  And you weak ass bitches crumblin'//  You mumblin'//  Nigga' got you stumblin'//  You hear it's thunderin'//  I say I'm worth about a Hundred-and//  Fifty-million motherfuckin' pennies, and enemies, struggle but I send 'em these, bubble//  From the anger that you caused me all the times you talked//  And the way I was pushed aside when you walked//  But you've embarked on an impossible mission if you wanna' scare me//  Niggaz can't tear me//  Leatherface couldn't even wear me//  But if you weak minded you can't bear me//  You asses is scary//  But I'm clear like a crystal ball//  When I pop off, it sound like a pistol fall//  I'm tired so just leave me alone//  Nigga, hard as a stone//  There ain't no other, no double, no twin, no clones//  But wanna-be's who try to act and be like me//  But they quickly run away screaming when they hear and see my lightning//  Yeah it's frighting//  And enlightning//  You see the situation is heightning//  
 

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Re:'So Tired' my rhyme
« Reply #1 on: March 26, 2004, 02:09:42 AM »
Tight.. the flow was tight.. lyrically good.. i felt the scheme.. keep going home boY!
 

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Re:'So Tired' my rhyme
« Reply #2 on: March 26, 2004, 03:03:40 AM »
dope and flows well, but it's kinda inconsistent. It started sorta like introspective, and then switched between braggodocio and battlerhyme. I think if contitued the song in the same spirit as the first few bars, we would have a masterpiece
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