Some experimental type of song, i think it sucks though

[Suffice]

Take a breath of the poisoned air, then pay the fare
Take a shower in the filthy water, that kills your hair
Smell the aroma of the daily stress and be aware
That nothing u do is worth a second stare
Look upon heavens but theres no vacancy there
Life’s a joke and she’s so difficult to bare
She’ll have you scared like a carrot by a hare
Well, the devil won’t even accept you in hell
And who the fuck are you? Can u tell me that?
Wouldn’t it be easier to say hello to the gat?
Fuck this shit, and also fuck that shit that you shat
There’s no reason to live when you’re a filthy rat
Cuz the fat cats always pull your fate from the hat;
They control how you eat, they control how you pat
Your homies on the back, and how you relax
And how much ass you get, whether you slow or you fast
It don’t matter what u want, cuz you’re just never asked
They lead you through a path, which ends when you pass
They path has only facts, follow it – you die with class
If you choose to diverge, you gonna get harassed
These petty acts are useless, they evaporate like gas
You’re a worthless piece of flesh to them, with density and mass
You hustle your whole life, to get shattered like glass
So the next time you step to them, it might be your last

(with another voice)
Damn it man, what’s wrong with u?
You gonna get this fellow down like the government do
He’s not even six yet, are you crazy dude?
Why you gotta tell this kid that his life is doomed?
Even though half the shit you’re sayin is true
That’s enough, the shit you’re doin ain’t cool
He hasn’t even started, but what if because of you
This innocent child never goes to school
What if he cuts his wrists, what if he breaks the rules
Have you thought of that? No you haven’t fool
Go to hell asshole, you gonna get me down too
Leave this place before I get my tool and shoot you
What have you done that is good? Not even a thing or two
I’m tired of always hearing you and your fucking issues
Do you need to diss people like your body needs food?

(((Incomplete verse)))


(1st guy again)
Go to hell asshole, I’m gonna do whatever I want
I’ll teach this child to steal and how to roll a blunt
How to be rude, and how to diss whomever he wants
How to hunt down faggots and how to fuck cunts
It’s not at all that I want to ruin his life
And it’s ain’t that I really want to cause a strife
I’m just telling the kid to be sharp as a knife
What’s with yellin at me, bitchin like my wife
I say shoot me if you want, but nothing’s gonna change
Whether you kill me now, or if I step off stage
So take a chill pill, and cool down your rage
Cuz I’m not the one to put these drones in a cage
The overseers line them up like shells in a twelve gauge
Day after day, they follow their say
I’m no messiah, I don’t preach the righteous way
So let the people drown if you really want that, Ok
Instead of fuckin around, you should have walked away
And when I’m done spittin, let’s just call it a day

[Jimmy Cash2120]

nice concept but the rhymin, ect., could be alot better