Sup

[Merciless]

Im jus lookin for a lil feedback on my shit

I Wrote this a couple days ago listenin 2 gorilla monsoon rap. Flows kinda complicated but lemme no wat u think. Peace

i split decibells, show rappers y they shoulda ate they vegetables
I arrest fools the best of you get taken out like festivals
the rest of you, 2 lackin in the area of testicles
2 step in my shoes.. u'l abused, black n blue
im inedible, so jump off my dick, before i slap u, out rap u
so cold that im creatin ice capsules, i grab tools, and smack fools
white, brown or black fools all get slewed by this rude dude
ugly, grimey, crude dude,
spittin sick transcribables undeniable to crews
dictated words make it impossible 4 me 2 lose
strong as bamboo, i breakthrough and choose clues 2 confuse you
hebrews muslims jews even christians go cookoo..
i enthuse the blues, accuse to amuse myself
find someone as good as me and i'll make him lose his health
my advanced stealth mean i can scope you from ur kitchen shelf and take ur wealth.....

i'll make u wish u never met me
but you'll never forget me, coz im the best, see?
merciless, i smoke sess up in north west
unmoveable like stone henge, i make u miss breaths
hearts r skippin wen in spittin
everybody wishin that my lyrics jus dont hit 'em coz it'll split 'em
in half like coconuts i go nuts
beat u down til both ur eyes shut
leave u unconscious, stop the nonsense
im sick of bullshit
on the radio another pop-rap hit, fuck that
its just whack, like what i'd do to most labels
for tryna destroy hiphop, sellin all the public fables
makin rappers forget all about how it started wit turn tables
only got thier eyes on dough, buff chicks up in the video
talkin about hoes, ice and gold is gettin old
and senile, i'l poke u in both eyes
so u cant see for a while, im just vile
makin rappers read thier own shit and feel denial.
i feel to wile - out, smack u round the head wit a trout
and just like that, merciless walks away from this bout
as a winner, no sinner but im destined for hell
coz the devils had plans for me since i was a sperm cell

[Kill]

keep spittin. u better than others on here already

[Merciless]

loll  cheers boss