Rookie Battle! lets do this

[wilz]

Yo any rookies wanna battle? reply quick.
16 bars or less
3 votes to win

any takers?

[Tay]

Yo I'm a rookie, but that's only in my name,
So much skill it's like I'm a vet in the game,
Like Jerry Rice's career, we almost one of the same,
Only difference is I don't have all that fame,
Doin' big thangz down in the LBC,
Computer thug, I'm an internet G,
Haha thats wack and it really ain't me,
Just tryin' to give these people laughs for free,
Truth is, I don't really get this whole battle,
Awkward like ridin' a horse with no saddle,
Just typin' words it's as boring as cattle,
No beat to flow on to make the speakers rattle,
Missin that bass that makes my Fossgates slap,
And that's the way that I put myself on the map,
Back in the Yay Area, where I learned to rap,
And I left the area when we got Warren Sapp,
But I love all of Cali dawg, its all curtains,
Where g's dig girls with smooth skin like Jergens,
My rhymes stomp yours your career is left hurtin,
Cuz you call for a battle but what you get is a murkin.

haha, this is wack but I'm new and I want to get some posts under my belt. Hit me back with your bars and also tell me what ya gotta do on internet battles lol.

[wilz]

I can tell you don't battle, u got the wrong type of music
Yeah u listen to dance music not rap music
Yeah thats right Trance music, yeah go head dance to it.
Before u say it no I ain't black
But that won't stop me from sayin your rap is whack
And if u don't whatch ur back am goin cut ur ball sack
Yeah we call that payback for u sayin this and that.
You look like a fuckin rat. when i pull the trigger it goin splat.
Your Rhymes are so weak that all i hear is a fuckin squeek
And yeah am gunnin for rookie of the week
So move over Killa T go take a fuckin Leak
Cos ur rhymes are so last fuckin week
Go play a game like hide and fuckin seek.
Cos am Bigga, Am Jigga ur Just memph Bleek
My flow just Sicka, More Thrilla, This just ain't ur Week.

[wilz]

P.S. I ain't got a clue about internet battles either this my first one lol

[wilz]

Come on folks get ur vote on.

[Tay]

Can we at least get 1 vote? i know these flows blow but we kept them short so it dont last long. ya didi mean?

[M Dogg™]

will vote soon... to tired now...   

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

vote: killatay


basically both of these verses were simple...but killatay had a few decent meta's in ther eto make me vote in his favor

[xxLx7]

Wiltz you need some stilts to come battle with me
I got skills that your about to see
you say you wanna battle and you think you got rhymes
you got nothin nothin but a nickel, heres a dime
now take your fifteen cents and walk out the door
I don't wanna see your face here no more
Your callin killa a rat tellin him to watch his back
Man I think you wanna stick your dick in his crack
How ya gonna cut him, when your suckin on his balls
pretendin his nuts are some mentoliptis halls
I got nothin else to say, nothin else to do
so this my last lyric, I'm gonna close on you
Don't come out to battle if you don't know how to play
this rap games not for loosers so turn and walk away....

[wilz]

u fuckin idiot ^ this battle was done ages ago. we want votes not another verse lol

not a bad rhyme tho

[M Dogg™]

Interesting battle

I gotta say KillaTay10, his rhyme flowed better I think, and it was pretty witty. Both where simple, but when done right, simple is good. Just keep working and try you best.

[wilz]

cheers for the feedback.

[xxLx7]

hey wiltz, I don't really care if the rap was done ages ago, I wanted to add my input, I didn't want to say which one was better, so I wrote my own. So keep your fuckin idots to yourself, and spend some time working on your rhymes you silly bastard. You both have some pretty good lyrics though....

Kyle

[wilz]

u added a letter to my name so it would rhyme lol

[xxLx7]

opps, my bad, I didn't even notice that. Sorry about that one..