hey heres a starter

[xxLx7]

Now what, you don't got shit on me
bros please, your talkin to a real og
lets see, I gonna throw these seeds
I don't wanna, but Im gonna make you bleed
Don't cry, because I ruined your life
its no supprise, but my rhymes right
you saw me comin, thought I had shit on you
now look your shinin my shoes
ok maybe, I shouldn't dog on you
just sit and keep shinin those shoes
you got skills when your shinin these shoes
heres a nickel, now go eat your pickel,
next time you rhyme, make sure you hit your line

Hey everyone, Just thought I would make my first post, and give you all a little sample of a short battle rhyme I am going to pull on saturday. I don't know if Im gonna say all that, anyone who has done a battle knows, you forget what you wrote, and throw for the choke... If you all got any sugestions, I'm up for it, a persons never as good as they think they are...

Kyle

[xxLx7]

Does no one give props or critisism?? Hook it up people!

[wilz]

hey u give feedback on my first one and vote in the rookie battle then i'll give some feedback

[Tay]

nice little rhyme, you probly wont remember it in the battle except for one line. tips: i guess just be confident like u know ur gonna go out and rip someone, do yo thang.