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[A_X_E]

ayo i wrote this shit up, tell me what yall think please, the flow is sorta deep, slow, poetic type shit feel me?
anyway holla!



I scare the masses, look at us like we bout to jack these bastards/
Jack asses, separated us into classes, harass us these fascists/
Im blastin like a semi automatic cannon, planning on cramming/
Money bags with jags, signing autographs the future happening/
Faster than I could ever imagine, im letting no fool take me under/
But if I blunder, I wonder will it strike like thunder? Might stun’ya/
What we come from and if we all just laid back to rest…
Would you put two to my chest? this civil unrest/
Stressed, I gotta beat em for leaders that really lead em/
They feeding color codes and promise notes to the mother load/
And to the other folks, they act like we been revoked/
To the lord we hope he’ll take us home/
Where we come from, has been raped, savagely/
Its like fate been mad at me, im cramming these rhymes/
Together in lines, to sever minds, incredible signs, that my spirit will rise/
Shine in the dirt, I could be blind from hurt/
but im surviving like a prisoner, trapped in the system, shouts to all my listeners/
experts and beginners, intermediates and risk takers, crack bakers and rim shakers/
jaw breakers and life takers, high stakers, my behavior enables greatness/
all you hatats can’t mistake it, im lacing tracks making you afraid to play em/
the states we raised in, is grenade delayin, axe stack more stacks than cats who pimp slap/
I’ll be back with rims packed with gold, chrome on its own aint enough, do the rough/
You get touched, if you caught with fuzz, pigs do things that bring tears to our shins/
Understand the reality of my words, man the gravity is absurd/
In other words, the weight of this hate taking place got me crazed, staying laced/
Make your fate a neckbrace, on the plus side, you chumps hide and run wild/
before its bust time, I must decline, don’t be mad at me, but fuck sanity, I’m outta my mind/



paz y gracias

holla

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Mutah

nice flow, but you should drop an audio link so we can actually hear you in action unless your a ghost writer. favorite line was the shins and tears part that was pretty tight, but anyways hit a nigga back.

 you might like Mic Check or Compton vs the Bronx

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/8/dualoutputmusic.htm

Mutah

[A_X_E]

ayo thx for the feedback and i checked ya beats, shit is bangin vato!, keep up the work!
my favs gotta be mic checked, Cpt vs Bx and Harlem vs Qb shit is really hard dawg
ayo my boy is working on an album presently, he all set for beats, but after hes done, ama start work on my shit prolly around next year, or late this year, all depends on how shit goes, and im shopping around for producers to hook me up with some beats for when i get on that mic, i think i could flow good on your shit, thing is i aint made out of money dawg, lots of those is pricy, we could work something out tho, holla at my on aim: OutlawAx or on msn: A_03_M@hotmail.com

holla!
paz