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h cottie is bac-tive?

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My first rhyme
« on: July 13, 2005, 11:44:28 AM »
my first ever rhyme never wrote down a line
spent all my time workin at a 9 to 5
place was a burger joint but i got caught smokin tree 8)
boss even had the balls to give me a loitering fee
said if i dont move my ass hes gonna call the police
so i put a red brick thru his new GT
immediately looked at me
but all he could say was nigga you crazy??
whipped out the 6 inch took a nice pee pee
i replied i just got promoted to a vigilante ;) 8


dont be too harsh! :-*

I WENT TO STAPLES CENTER WEN I WAS WALKING MY GOLD RAG FALL OF MY POCKET AND THE GROUND WAS WET TO AND DIRTY MY RAG GOT DIRTY A LIL BIT PULL IT IT BACK AND MAKE SURE IT WOULD NOT DROP AGAIN ROCKING MY RAG AGAIN HOMIE 8
 

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Re: My first rhyme
« Reply #1 on: July 13, 2005, 01:01:22 PM »
Dog I ain't gonna be harsh..But if this was on a track it would be on "Step Yo Game Up" for sure...Cats like me dig punchlines, multi's, wordplay and stronger rhyme..Just lookin out..Peace
 

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Re: My first rhyme
« Reply #2 on: July 13, 2005, 02:50:14 PM »
ay thats tight but put it in keystyle...cause thats the place where you could get recognition for your writtens. This is for audios
 

h cottie is bac-tive?

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Re: My first rhyme
« Reply #3 on: July 13, 2005, 10:27:41 PM »
lol "step yo game up" i like that

I WENT TO STAPLES CENTER WEN I WAS WALKING MY GOLD RAG FALL OF MY POCKET AND THE GROUND WAS WET TO AND DIRTY MY RAG GOT DIRTY A LIL BIT PULL IT IT BACK AND MAKE SURE IT WOULD NOT DROP AGAIN ROCKING MY RAG AGAIN HOMIE 8