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Sanford - V. President of the Dangerous Crew Movement:

--- Quote from: A-Block on November 07, 2006, 07:49:43 AM ---If dats ur 1st dis den its all gud blud,  :o

U'll get betta wit tyme same as most tings....

--- End quote ---

thanks man!   8)

yea, imma kep goin...see how good i can get.   ;D

QuietTruth:
Propz! You had some good lines. 'Im breakin shit down for you like a fat kid would a pack of kit kats.' That was tight. You can get alot of laughs out that and nah not bad ones. Def. keep goin' cuz you'll start improving the more you write. Keep it up!

Mo Z. Dizzle:
lyrics-wise i thot it was really good

even the nicknames u used wasn't a bad idea

i didnt like the way u wrote the first verse acting like him though....the idea u used to act like him is funny in a good way, but i think u should incorporate it into the actual song and stuff; maybe cut down on that and write a new verse

that's only my opinion though...definitely continue to write cause u have the lyrical ability

Sanford - V. President of the Dangerous Crew Movement:
props to everyone! 
yea, imma continue...just wrote a new one in the key styles, check it out!   8)

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