Continuation of me and Narrator...

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

Here is the continuation of me and So Much Style battling..I made a part 2 for the 14 and under thread, Peep it out, and vote again...Heres the link...



http://forum.igangsta.com/cgi-bin/yabb/YaBB.cgi?board=keystyle&action=display&num=987316874

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

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[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

He ripped me again....I think i might have improved though

[So Much Style]

yeah dude, u did better this time..the only problem (that bugs the hell otu of me) when looking at your lyrics is the way you swithc from bar to bar such as:

And I don’t wanna hear ypu speak/
Cuz ya style was bitten, and mines unique/

Your like a puppet man, you can’t do ya own thing/
You always got this stupid muthafucka pullin ya string/

Muthafucka, I aint playin around/
I’ll pull out my heat and lay you on the ground/

I’m a rhyme enforcer/
A pain endorser/

man this is not good at all, it looks like your writing a poem of cuplets..you need to let your rhymes flow from one to another..just tryin to break it down for ya, but keep workin

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

I know...I swich rhymes to quik....Like Nelly or some shit

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

But check out how this one lasted.....I noticed what you said by the time I was in the middle of my last rgyme....Here is one where I didnt swich quik...

You know... She makes ya dick grow/
And she makes you wanna blow/
Then unload loads/
Of seemen/
You wanna hear her screamin/
Like a ho/
For mo'/
So please just go/
And lay Low/
If ya know/
whats good for you, yo/
before I show.../

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

another example...


You can't fight the addiction/
You need me in ya system/
So you just start dissin/
Thinkin I will listen/
You want more friction.../
Between us/
But I gotta go pissin/
With my big penis/





I think i'm capable, but i have a habbit of rapping like Nelly

[So Much Style]

yeah that was better flow but sucky word play

[TheMan329]

yo so much style, isnt what he did that pisses you off exactly like you have on your rhymes at the end of all of your posts? both of you are pretty good though for being so young, you guys are young right?

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

Hahah, i've just noticed that...Narrator quote is what pisses him off about me...It's all good....Peace


PS, Dont change your quote, it's tight

[So Much Style]

NO?? i just said what pisses me off when i read a rhyme is when they switch like:

yo your gay
thats all i gotta say
cause you are a ho
yes you know

like that shit...
my sig is tight..those are my favorite lines i have ever wrote