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Round 1: (L) Job vs. (W) Lunatic

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TraceOneInfinite:

--- Quote from: Lord JOB on July 16, 2008, 12:17:57 PM ---yo you aint a lunatic but you suck like the st.lunatics/
midwest swing ya fat ass moms to the sun
and cause a LUNAr eclipze/
Oh you like interviewin rappers come meet
these clipse/
They not from virginia , they from iraq
and dont speak english/
So you gonna to need a translator,
to tell you, we want the loot or
get mad holes in you and sleep with the fishes like sponge bob fool/
and fuck them niggas, that always vote NO-to-my-flow/
them niggas reading my shit with the comprehensive skills
of a 4 year old/
thats the reason why hip hop is in a deep ass hole/
just look at these clowns, that big up these weak ass
garbage flows/
they know nothing about the *TRUTH*,
so they should stay *QUIET* like they name
and disappear like lil zane/
retarded ass niggas biggin up papoose/
but papoose hasnt come out with one FUCKIN
record, so how stupid are you/
eye never overstood, how a nigga can win in a battle
when 90 percent of his flow wasnt even directed
at the nigga he was facing.........OOPPPPSSS/
and fuck this 8 to 12 bars/
aint no limits on me/
eye am a untamed beast the combination of
the hulk and king kong homie/
but unlike the original King kong
eye dont  FUCK WITH WHITE BITCHS YA'll/
and eye love readin the daily obituaries, when its filled
with nothing but white people/
it brings joy to my heart, when they start to diminish as a people
because they fuckin evil............

FUCK THIS PLACE............THIS FAKE BATTLING SPOT.........EYE AM DONE WITH THIS BULLSHIT

SPOT FILLED WITH BULLSHIT NIGGAS WHO CANT FUCKIN JUDGE A BATTLE FOR SHIT............BUM ASS

NIGGAS.......... SHOUT OUT TO THE REAL NIGGAS THAT CAN SEE N FEEL A REAL FLOW..........

FUCKIN THIS CANDY SNAP ASS NIGGAS.......AND EYE AM OUT...............


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Great wordplay in your opening and you get extra points for dissing the St. Lunatics-  +5

Nice use of metaphor with your sponge Bob reference   +2

You get points for respondin to people who have spoke out against your flow, you personalized this rhyme and developed your character which takes more skill than just droppin a series of metaphors   +7

That was a clever subliminal about going over 8-12 bars, good use of humor +3

more creativity with the ill shit about white people, more character development  +4

+5 for overall entertainment value of you talkin shit

score= 26

TraceOneInfinite:

--- Quote from: Lunatic 63 on July 15, 2008, 09:20:53 PM ---key style needed to get rid of ya ass,
real quick and fuckin fast,
so Infinite called me in for the "JOB"
one man spitter but im feelin like a MOB
of people attackin you at the head
after this battle, ya key style career dead
so back to the g-spot and argue with a white
your battle record brutal, you aint winnin this fight
i see ya avatar with a man holdin a shotty
i dead u in this battle and then dump ya body
u attemptin to fight me is like goin at the "LORD"
thats like committin suicide, wrap ya neck around the cord
so your really just deadin yourself
Infinite, I won, now hand me the belt

--- End quote ---

solid opening and wordplay and speakin to the situation + 3

solid personal disses bout endin his carear and sendin him back to g-spot  + 4

average finish + 2

+4 bonus points for keepin it 8-12 bars when Job didn't

score = 13

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