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//ITS ON TIMELOCK (tom187um vs timelock)
NoT:
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can u explain this more, i know what cliche means, but i dont get what ur talkin bout though
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Sure... by cliche I mean expected and without originality. I know there are other meanings but that's what I meant by it. Here are some examples...
Please TELL ME why it came to this TIMELOCK//
this be your own personal HELL G cuz for a DIME u suck COCK//
- Any multi that includes the word "G" as a syllable in its rhyme is almost guaranteed to come off "cliche". The combination of that and "hell", "dime", and "cock" makes this multi ripe with hip hop cliches. I'm not saying it's always bad to be cliche because sometimes it makes sense. But more often then not (and definitely in this case) it comes off sounding like you were just reaching for words to rhyme with your previous words that would sound "battle like". Also, calling an emcee a cheap whore has been done so many times...
you embarassing tha kings wit those WACK VERSES//
foe dissin me you goin ride in some BLACK HERSES/
- I've heard those exact multis before on several occasions. The idea of killing your opponent is totally cool/understandable in a battle verse byut there are so many more original ways of saying it.
cuz we both got that same MENTALITY, i hope u ready to face your FATALITY//
u gettin dissed cuz u practice HOMOSEXUALITY, and also like
BESTIALITY//
- The first line is pretty good and I felt a strong finish coming then I saw all it was is a "you're gay/weird" diss combined with a "you fuck cows" diss. Not especially original, I'm sure we can both agree.
Actually, those are the only really good examples I can see of cliches in your verse but I still don't think it's good enough to win this battle. I'ma up your rating (good lookin' out for yourself) but this battle was a pretty one-sided affair IMO.
'Illicit':
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i just edited it a lil' but i won already anyway
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conceited bastard lol :P
TimeLock:
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Most of your multis were cliche... your wordplay was mediocre at its best points... your vocab was never above average... your piece lacked meaning... basically, a below-average piece... I was a little disappointed because you have a ridiculous amount of potential that is untapped...
OVERALL RATING: 2.8/5 (2.5 is average) - formerly 2.3
TIMELOCK REVIEW
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A very solid piece... but a little disappointing coming from our crew's "franchise player"... it was still good enough to win this battle but... your multis outshone your wordplay and although your vocab was good it was inconsistent... you also seemed to lose your focus in a couple of places...
OVERALL RATING: 3.5/5 (2.5 is average)
VOTE = TimeLock
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thanx for voting everyone
yeah NoT i did not spit my best i did not feel like spiting to hard cuz i would not have bin worth it it would just be over doing it and i all ready beat tom before so i was not in the mood to over kill him lol
peace love and sooooooul lol
'Illicit':
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yeah NoT i did not spit my best i did not feel like spiting to hard cuz i would not have bin worth it it would just be over doing it and i all ready beat tom before so i was not in the mood to over kill him lol
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conceited bastard lol :P
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