Do I exist?

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Heres a rhyme i wrote in class today...


The girl I love, she dont even know i exist
From the world above, Im to nervouse to even blow her a kiss
Tried to glow up my wrist, and show off my shit
she still dont know i exist
shit, lifes mo' than a bitch
How can i show her my true thoughts
She's too hot
I even tried to act a thug like my name was 2Pac
All I got is a bottle lotion and a huge cock
I can pick another fish from the ocean, but i choose not
Shit, I love her to death
Id do anything just to fuck her in bed
And Im a sucker for head
But sex is not all, I really wanna get to know her
God, let me show her,
I can get her wet while sober
I cant even pass by her, i get more than butterflies
If I even tried to talk I'd start to stutter N cry
To my friends I was utterin lies
about how shes nothing but thighs
But it aint true, cuz she so fuckin fine
She has TOO many qualities to discuss in this rhyme
She's beutifull, a muthafuckin work of nature
I dont know why it never occured to rape her

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

drop your thoughts and rate it...

[maxi-padz]

this shit was pretty tight man.. i must get bored in class like me lol.. i dont rate keystyles with numbers as its kinda stupid but this would make a tigth audio.. get a beat for it..

~1~

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

any more thoughts on this? Its my first rhyme about love...

[infinite59]

Yo Dogg... I give you mad props for having the courage to open yourself up on this one... although why does it always have to be about a girl when mc's wanna get personal?:....anyway, this shit was thoroughly entertaining.... even had some ill humor to it..... Good piece.

4.68

[bLaDe]

pretty good, but say more about her personality, her inner self n shit, peace

 -{bLaDe}

[HBKid_Jr]

now thats some dope shit,  straight up

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

LoL, I wrote another meaningfull rhyme today in class, but its not about a girl...

[Entreri117]

Nice shit man, that was a tight flow. I liked it...props