Confusion - A song i wrote.. R&R plz

[Reef]

[Gareefa - Chorus]
Why must you confuse me?
You change like the wind
your abusing me
every muthafucker using me

[Gareefa - Verse 1]

ever since my first rhyme wit ceeride
i been living a life full of lies,
empty promises and broken dreams
everything in this world aint what it seems
i been tryin to keep my mind clean
away from all these impurities
but they attacked me like a cureless diease
destroying my body, now im possessed
my live is a huge void like an unsigned cheque
wit a gold chain around my neck
but why do i possess these things?
big-time rappers with their platinum rings
bracelets and chains
but life will rust like a disused train
layin down rhymes in sunshine or rain
no pain no gain
we make weapons to kill and mame
then we are condemed by the government when we use 'em
nuclear warefare a new generation
apocolyptic rap
i am the past, present and future
no one can deny that
nas has got a gun, he'll be quick to shoot ya
not as quick as bin laden would nuke ya

[Chorus]

[Gareefa - Verse 2]

why do i chose to stay in this world?
i insist on watchin news that makes my hair curl
everything back2front and upside down
nothin to do, in my fucked up town
adults look down on me an frow
jus beacuse i dress different
wit my hat on apparantly im a thug
ha, what a sterotype
an every thug needs some love
girls dont stick wit me
cuz im looked down upon
by the popular kids
they laugh at me cuz i dont give a shit
about other peoples opinions
they know they got a lil bit of me in em
you dirty minded may now think im a stud
a manwhore, male slut
see your mouth? it needs to be shut
i push life aside but
it comes back and bites me ass
harder than before
im gettin to the point where i feel like knockin on heaven's door

[Chorus]

[Gareefa - Verse 3]

its all hapenin' now
life is collapsing before me
im trippin, about to go over the top
you lied to me,
now im lookin for a magnum wit one shot
you said we'd last,
shoulda known you were talkin out ya ass
lying to me for the sake of jelousy
i thought i was low, but im no less than you
19 days and it was over jus like that
said we were two different people
how'd you expect me to take that?
i said i was fine but you know i lie
i was still sparing you feelings, holdin it inside
on the verge of it, but i never cryed
sadness turned to anger
i dont know you anymore, your like a stranger
anger is built up inside and im tryin to relase it
ive gotta bottle this up, see the moment and siese it
but all the tension and anger i gotta relieve it
wishin i could tell you how i feel right now
but i aint got the balls
so my music should tell ya how i feel - like a used and abused whore
i try and forgive and forget
but, we're still friends, is that correct?
you already broke my heart, so why not break my neck?

[Chorus]                                                            

['Illicit']

like i said, its ill.   the hook is better than the old one but still not the best but no offense dawg.

peace

[Reef]

Nah no offense taken.. I need honnest views and shit..
I couldnt stand the hook either..

[BL7]

That was tight..

[rock_chick]

great song dude
ur well hot

[infinite59]

Tight shit homie... keep spitting, real deep, and thoughtful, a very detailed and daring attempt to dig into the depths of a man's soul, fears and heartaches..... this was leaning more toward the poetry side of the penjalum, it's a fine line, hip-hop generally involves more of an overcoming aspect, whether through violence or by any means necessary, this was a more straightforward approach, bold in the fact that it offers no relief or solution from the melancholy mortification.... the song I always alude to is Eminem's "Brain Damage" where Eminem takes a sad story and then through his imagination he seeks a fictional revenge against his advesary.. that's the illest way of dark storytelling, a fictional solution... maybe attempt to incorporate that in future projects...... all things being equal...... tight shit homie... keep spitting  

[TimeLock]

nice ish very nice make a beat to go with it and put it on audio

[Reef]

i would drop an auido.. but im having trouble finding a beat.. (an my mic lol)