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MARK ME ON THIS PLEASE - IM SHIT! LOL

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Rud:
MY RHYMES STILL IN SCHOOL/
COS I BREAK EVERY RULE/
EVER MADE TO MAKE YOU LOOK LIKE A FOOL/
BUT IT OFTEN BACKFIRES/
GET BEAT BACK BY LIARS/
AND THOSE FUCKIN NEW TRIERS/
DID U THINK I GOT BEAT IN THE FIRST ROUND (OH YES)/
DID U THINK I GOT CRUSHED IN THE SECOND (NOT MY BEST)/
THE THIRD TIME AROUND HAS GOT TO RE-TEST/
MY LYRICAL ABILITY/
TO CRUSH YOUR AGILITY/
UR LYRICS FLOW LIKE A RUSSIAN GYMNAST/
BUT I GUARANTEE IT CANT LAST/
TO GET PAST THE VERY REACH OF MY CLASS/
YOU WILL SEE AFTER PRACTICE/
MY LYRICS WILL MAKE SHIT FLOW LIKE A LAXATIVE/
WITH CREATIVENESS 2 BLOW U AWAY/
YOU BEG ME TO STAY/
BUT YOUR RHYMES JUST GET IN MY WAY/
SO ILL BRUSH U ASIDE AND GET ON MY STRIDE/
AND MAKE U ALL ONLOOK WITH PRIDE


I WAS BORED, AND THAT WAS A BIT WACK

VOTE N E WAY!

peace

TheSheriff:
It flowed decently in some respects, but the rhyming was a bit bland. I would suggest either ABAB, AAAA, or AABA CCDC...

I would give a 5 to an experienced keystyler(mediocre), but as you're new to this, it seems, 6...It's a fair first effort.

Rud:
K, WELL 3RD EFFORT! LOL

ILL TAKE THAT ON BOARD!


CHEERS

MORE COMMENTS PLEASE!!

peace

Joachim:

--- Quote ---MY LYRICS WILL MAKE SHIT FLOW LIKE A LAXATIVE/
--- End quote ---


That lines tight bro, you gettin better every time...

Rud:
CHEERS!

;D

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