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Reef

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Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« on: November 15, 2002, 02:23:21 PM »
Check it out.. I jus started rhymin 4 no reason.. this is what i came up wiv..

you aint on my level on whatever level you think your on/
atomic or physical you aint touchin me if you are; what you been drinkin on?/
im bubonic, i plauge your mind like the chronic the love i got for this shit is platonic/
cause i aint willin to blow up, unless i got the impact of a supernova/
become luminous, i shine in the bitches eyes like im cassanova wit a rose in my mouth/
gareefa becomes the watcher something you cant comprehend/
influencing kids with my brain, words and actions but in the end/
the shit's jus hard to explain with all these destractions,/
attractions, fatal attractions cause me to watch you closer than before/
a rapper, rhyme composer, some define me as hardcore/
but ima watch you closer and closer cause thats my design/
standin, waitin in line, waitin for my fate to be served/
every striaght line i curved and nothin will ever be what is seems/
you neva seen me, wanna be me? i'll rip you at the seams!/
empty dreams and tears of blood, tears of love, ill like breakin the neck of a dove/
when push comes to shove, i can be nice, but usually im a asshole like Obie Trice/
but think twice before confrontation, cause i show now hesitation when i squeeze
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Xearo

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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #1 on: November 15, 2002, 05:53:58 PM »
Hot shit right there...

NICE PIECE WATCHER...
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Pillow

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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #2 on: November 15, 2002, 09:52:10 PM »
yo man that was some hot ass shit for real man *OUCH, my fucking keys are hot!* LOL keep rhymin
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Reef

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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #3 on: November 16, 2002, 11:40:05 AM »
Quote from: ~Blanket~ on November 15, 2002, 09:52:10 PM
yo man that was some hot ass shit for real man *OUCH, my fucking keys are hot!* LOL keep rhymin

lol


Thanx for tha feedback people
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bez

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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #4 on: November 16, 2002, 12:30:14 PM »
dopeness. real good man, your the bomb
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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #5 on: November 17, 2002, 04:28:36 AM »
Nice piece, fun to read
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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #6 on: November 17, 2002, 01:57:03 PM »
Dope Ish, Flow, Vocab, Everythin'
Keep It Droppin' Homie, Can't Wait To Hear You Rap SumThin'...

Peace
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da_notorious_mack

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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #7 on: November 17, 2002, 02:27:07 PM »
"empty dreams and tears of blood, tears of love, ill like breakin the neck of a dove/
when push comes to shove, i can be nice, but usually im a asshole like Obie Trice"

that was nice as hell,you improved so much since i first came here....overall id give this 7/10
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bez

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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #8 on: November 17, 2002, 04:47:42 PM »
Quote from: Mack on November 17, 2002, 02:27:07 PM
"empty dreams and tears of blood, tears of love, ill like breakin the neck of a dove/
when push comes to shove, i can be nice, but usually im a asshole like Obie Trice"

that was nice as hell,you improved so much since i first came here....overall id give this 7/10

yo mack why dont u ever rate any of my songs man?
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@Ss@sSiN

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Re:Random Freestyle (Feedback Plz)
« Reply #9 on: November 18, 2002, 07:41:32 AM »
there aint enough zeros?

nah j/p
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