My first drop.. (feedback plz)

[3-l33t]

(im new to this so be nice)


It's all like a game of chess piece by piece ill rise above the rest::
When y'all desceased ima still be here, dropin rhymes till the end of time::
Dis shit is hotter than Oj trial::
Im new, AND better you, Ima let it show, It'll shine on threw like the bright sun over the morning dew::
"illicit"(illest) should be my name, Mah dawgs know spittin lyrics is mah game::
Respect or no respect iz all the same, if you believe not you iz insane::
3-l33t droppin his first line, don't get happy soon ill be takin y0 fame::
Ya broke ass should apply for food stamps, cause ya babys momma getting mad crampz::
Imda champ with the big name 3-l33t blowing ya spot-n-takin ya fame.

['Illicit']

if you call yourself illicit, we'll have a problem. cant be 2 of em lol.

not bad for your first drop btw, keep workin on it.

[3-l33t]

it was a joke to you

['Illicit']

  itz coo

[~|~PimpFemcee~|~]

right.. Tight spit..I see you taken my way with tha little :: instead of bars   lol anyways...nice spit fah sho..

[Reef]

nice shit.. Keep spittin and improve man..