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Reef:
I was feelin the overall flow of the verse.. But like TimeLock said.. you really need to logiclly construct your shit to make it better.. Its like a story in a way i supose.. you cant go from sayin... 'The cat is green' to 'the dog hasd a big cock' it jus dont make sense.

Try and order ya shit a bit more logicly... if you do wanna change subject do it.. but dont jump away from it two barz l8a..

Jus some pointers..

Koncept:

--- Quote from: Gareefa on January 12, 2003, 02:21:49 PM ---'The cat is green' to 'the dog has a big cock' it jus dont make sense.

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LOL

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