Tha Day I put down my mic (feedback)

[TiNmaN]

i know i said i retired and for tha most part i did but i miss keystylin a little so i decided to put together a lil mini song lol, its not quite done yet but lemme know what yall think of it so far.......


Tha day i put down my mic, and take a hike, from this rap game is a day i wont like//
Tha day i put down my mic, and take a hike, from this rap game is a day i wont like//

I ll never put down my mic//
untill my death i ll fight for tha right to recite and shine light//
for tha fools that dont know what up, its goin down tonite//
imma do shit tha way it should be done//
spit knowledge, smoke weed, and have  some fun//
my mic is my only connection to tha outside world//
for ppl to know what i am thinkin as my mind swirl//
thoughts goin around in my head in a vigourous circle//
comparin u to me as an MC is like comparin stephan to steve erkal//

this is all i have so far, i mma finish it tonite

[Kill]

nice, not on the same level as some of the shit you spit earlier, but nice

['Illicit']

agree wit ol' Killa up there

[@Ss@sSiN]

thats cuz he bite it..lol ^^

[ILLPrOpHeCy]

"ass"asin wen everyone flows do u always say they bite jus cuz your jealous grow up give ppl respect instead of saying they bite jus coz they can keystyle better than u if u want a battle, battle me

[Kill]

thats cuz he bite it..lol ^^

I knew this comment would be dropped in here sooner or later

[@Ss@sSiN]

lol.. just playing blanket

[da_notorious_mack]

nice piece.....fuck assasin.....jus jealous cus he bites an we still think he ass

[TiNmaN]

Thanks to all that dropped feedback. and if ppl think i bit that, i dont give a fuck.....

[Kill]

nice piece.....fuck assasin.....jus jealous cus he bites an we still think he ass

lol

[Koncept]

nice piece.....fuck assasin.....jus jealous cus he bites an we still think he ass

[TiNmaN]

FINAL VERSE:


(Hook)
Tha day i put down my mic, and take a hike, from this rap game is a day i wont like//
Tha day i put down my mic, and take a hike, from this rap game is a day i wont like//

I ll never put down my mic//
untill my death i ll fight for tha right to recite and shine light//
for tha fools that dont know what up, its goin down tonite//
imma do shit tha way it should be done//
spit knowledge, smoke weed, and have  some fun//
my mic is my only connection to tha outside world//
for ppl to know what i am thinkin as my mind swirl//
thoughts goin around in my head in a vigourous circle//
comparin u to me as an MC is like comparin stephan to steve erkal//
compared to me you just a spit in tha ocean//
Never could you rock a crowd with vibrant motion//
i have given nottin to my mic except straight devotion//
24/7 showin str8 emotion//
cause without that you wont make no sales-promotion//
so grab your pen, ped and lets ride//
i ll never put down my mic, got 2 much pride//

(Hook)
Tha day i put down my mic, and take a hike, from this rap game is a day i wont like//
Tha day i put down my mic, and take a hike, from this rap game is a day i wont like//