Author Topic: Freestyle  (Read 238 times)

Ignyte

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Freestyle
« on: March 30, 2003, 10:17:57 PM »
i make your spine ricochet, off my fist at any time of the day/
so dont dare come my way, unless your willing to pay/
or your gonna learn how to play, a different type of game, where you pray/
so "say what you say" but when i meet you, ill be "in da club" signed up with dre/
bet you ass that i am bigger, and you can start to reconsider/
that my beef with you is bitter, coz i shit on you cats that yal run for yal kitty litter/
but that is how i am always on the grind, i stroll through the clubs with pussy on my mind/
i get all yal yungins coming up to me asking for a rhyme, but like i say to everyone i aint got the time/
i showed this girl my dick it almost made her blind, but nobody told me a big dick was a crime/
im like everybody i work 5 til 9, but after work im dressed to impress coz i got punani to find/

first spit that ive put on this board
not that good, feedback please
« Last Edit: March 30, 2003, 10:18:52 PM by Ignyte »
 

'Illicit'

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Re:Freestyle
« Reply #1 on: March 31, 2003, 01:47:55 AM »
not too bad actually, lil simplistic, a bit hard to overlook, lackin structure, but some cool lines in it.  

keep postin tho, homie.

peace

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T.J.

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Re:Freestyle
« Reply #2 on: March 31, 2003, 03:40:35 AM »
not bad. like illicit said it lacked structure, but it was fairly good. keep writin up.
 

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Re:Freestyle
« Reply #3 on: March 31, 2003, 06:04:14 AM »
2mics...
 

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Re:Freestyle
« Reply #4 on: March 31, 2003, 05:42:48 PM »
decent.. even though you kinda got this..

**weak  line**
**punch line**
**weak line**
**punch line**


overall not bad.