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--- Quote from: Kill on March 01, 2003, 04:45:54 PM ---Pero a lo mejor tienes algunos problemas con la pronunciacion ingles (sorry, there's no accents on my keyboard). Porque...

*smartass Kill got nuthin to do and starts to dissect that verse*


--- Quote ---Sittin-back-an'-Maxin, To smooth Jazz-sounds...
Rappin-fact-an'-lapsin, Starbux cruisin my veins, passed-out...
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Why are you addin "sittin" and "rappin" to your word chains when they don't rhyme at all ? You don't have to make it look longer that way


--- Quote ---Unconsiously writin my fingertips tappin-away...
Slappin-my-face, with New Orleans rhythm snappin-my-sway...
Trapped in a trance thinkin of a Women who's-mine...
True-ties with lyrical justice, couldn't compare to her eyes...
Powerhouse trumpets, strummin what is the chillest vibe...
The "realest" listen an cant hide, from Nats way to confide...
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Aight, this is where you fuck up ya whole flow...after rhymin the "app"-words with away, face and sway (not really immaculate either) you say "trapped-in-a-TRANCE", which destroys the whole multie-based structure, cause "trapped-in-a-TRACE" wouldn't make much sense, eh ? Then there's no multies no more, all of a sudden, and you rhyme "eyes" with "mine", "ties" and "vibe"...how impressive


--- Quote ---Cool and collected, dressin and impressin-This-world...
Sax grazin tracks, even the wax is-checkin-its-whirl
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again, how the fuck is that "is" connected with the rest of it ?


--- Quote ---Piano comes in, drummin it's own-percussion...
Stirring eyes, Billy Holiday's proned-discussion...
Miles Davis...The best is yet to come, and Wont-it-be-Fly?
Sonnets-derived from louisinna steet's, seasoned cry....
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why the fuck do you think does "sonnet" have a DOUBLE-n ? Yes, cause that makes the pronounciation different from what it would be if it was "sonet" with a single n...and no, the way it is it does not rhyme with "won't-it" cause for bthat it'd have to be "sonet"

Fa real, I have to re-rate this...It don't deserve such a high rating. Que puta mierda has escribido, bein merciful I give this a 1.1/10...LOL





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good job...Maybe i did underestimate your ability...an the "sonnet" i was looking for is spelt like that...but props to ya for breakin it down...

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