It's June 15, 2024, 03:19:52 PM
nice lyrics......tone down on the reverb a lil and use doubles to emphasize your rhyming words+adlibs g
nice beat. vocals - whoa, there is so much wrong here. 1) Mic presence is level aids patient. rap from your diaphragm and work on your breath control. Nobody wants to listen to something that is completely flat and weak sounding. Are you a weak bitch or are you a man with something to say?!? 2) Reverb - what is going on here, did you add effects or are you rapping in a locker room somewhere? 3) Isolate your vocals - do you know what a vocal booth is? I know you cant afford real studio time but there are plenty of youtube tutorials on how to record vocals from home. Start there. You absolutely have to get those vocals to stop bouncing off whatever and again I'm not sure if that is your recording environment or you added reverb effects. If you are going to rap quiet and passively you need to get closer to the mic. 4) Timing, Rhythm - You are trying to fit too many words in to a rigidly structured instrumental and it all sounds jumbled and off beat. Have you considered spoken word poetry instead of hip hop because this won't pass as the latter with pretty much anyone. Spoken word poetry is kind of like rap but not confined to a 4/4 beat or melody, so you wont have to worry about sounding off track.The beat is good. If you made that, try sticking to making beats.
i like your concept...beats is chill