Author Topic: Ocean Colour (Read 108 times)

Mickaveli_#1 · « **on:** April 16, 2003, 08:51:33 AM »

Mind expressive always open and expossed,
cathing thoughts like the air through a ball a pitcher throws,
Birds flowing collide through the clouds delicatly smooth,
convene listening to waves giving us the emotions we choose,
A peaceful wave can develop into a vast monster opens to roar,
One in the sea becomes destructive and absurd when exposed to the shore,
Feelings, feelings like the ocean so much space to reflect accessibly,
Containing sea weed, preditors and all kinds of blamelss creatures so unforgetablty,
For every action and thought I choose to ignore,
I return to consider at the oceon once more

Mickaveli_#1 · « **Reply #1 on:** April 16, 2003, 08:54:03 AM »

What it is is deeper than my usual. This is about emotions we all got, we have sharks angry and fericious things like that in the oceon like we got anger in our minds as well as old sea weed (thoughts, memorys) and innocent creatures that are easily attacked in the water (our soft spots we have)

I might do more deep stuff like this

Reef · « **Reply #2 on:** April 16, 2003, 09:18:57 AM »

Nice shit man.. I liked the idea with the extended metaphor.. Keep spittin

bez · « **Reply #3 on:** April 16, 2003, 09:19:12 AM »

Quote from: Mickey a/k/a Mickaveli on April 16, 2003, 08:51:33 AM

Mind expressive always open and expossed,
cathing thoughts like the air through a ball a pitcher throws,
Birds flowing collide through the clouds delicatly smooth,
convene listening to waves giving us the emotions we choose,
A peaceful wave can develop into a vast monster opens to roar,
One in the sea becomes destructive and absurd when exposed to the shore,
Feelings, feelings like the ocean so much space to reflect accessibly,
Containing sea weed, preditors and all kinds of blamelss creatures so unforgetablty,
For every action and thought I choose to ignore,
I return to consider at the oceon once more

that was good. Its sort of the same way I write.