Lost Titan -vs- Jaydubwa(vote)

[Lost Titan]

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15-20 lines
3 voes ko
4 votes win
votes explain

[Lost Titan]

My words will damage you, inflict you with pain/
Spittin' hot shit derived from scriptures with in the brain/
I expect nothin' from you but lyrics that are simple and plain/
It's all jokes aside when it comes to this battlin' game/
A flashy dude, that's why your dame wanna strattle my frame/
You the type to get knocked and tattle, you lame/
Snitch out your boys from their first to their last name/
That's why a newbie like you won't be around long/
You'll be left six feet deep, your next door neighbor a ground hog/
You just found out when it comes to battlin' there's no equal/
And if we ever do battle again, the topic will read "it's over the seqeul"....................

Aww shit they done let lost out of his cage/
bout blast off and rip thru this cat rampage/
Come out yo mouth at Sev with some shit u spit/
I''ll BREAK THE HANDS OF THE MAN THAT WROTE YA SHIT/
Believe me, Like Pac said i take this war shit deeply/
And I''ll fuckin pop myself before a bitch nigga beats me/
Ramp i know u wack and i aint heard u rap/
2much dont talk to much u might get slapped/
Testing Thirty dawg c''mon, u cats r foolz/
Probably do better singin on tracks like Ja Rule/
My words are weapons, spittin 16''s at yo head/
Straight hollow point lyrics leave u faggott niggas dead/

[Lost Titan]

where you at??/

[jaydubuwa]

Ur names lost titan
Tryin to make urself like somethin ur not
Talkin about a gun thatchya don’t even got/
Everyone knowz u alwayz be talkin mad shit
But no one cares not even a lil bit/
U try to shpit wit words u don’t even undastand
Next time u try to rhyme make sure itz shit u can comprehend/
all theze threats you be writin
Are all bark but no bitin/
U think ur wordz can damage me
Well I’m not cryin so let it be/
Just cuz I’m new doesn’t mean I won’t last long
Before u know it  this shit be ova/
 My words maybe simple but I’m straight to tha point/
I don’t speak lies an say I’m smokin a joint/
I don’t rhyme for fame
I speak the truth unlike u who alwayz tryin to play fuckin gamez/
So stop talkin about faggot ass niggas, u have no rite to
So shut up bitch and stop actin like ur kewl/

[vitodeluca]

Lost- Your shit is definitely gettin' tighter compared to some of the older shit that I've seen you write.  Your first verse flowed real nice and you had some nice wordplay.  "You just found out when it comes to battlin' there's no equal/
And if we ever do battle again, the topic will read "it's over the seqeul"...................." LOL

If I can give one piece of humble advice it would be watch out for biting, when you rhyme "scripture on the brain...dame" it sounded a lot like 50 cent's "scriptures on the brain, I could spit at your dame, straight out the good book...ect".  I know it was different but some might take that as biting.  Plus, is jaydubuwa also known as rampage??? Overall though, real tight verse.

Jaydubuwa- Your verse was good but you could do well to incorporate some multis into it and some of the rhymes didn't really rhyme, i.e. "Well I’m not cryin so let it be/
Just cuz I’m new doesn’t mean I won’t last long
Before u know it  this shit be ova/"  Ya know?

Anyways, Lost gets my vote, hope y'all don't mind the criticism, just one newbie's opinion

[Lost Titan]

yo vito thanks.
1-0 me

[Franchise3]

id have to say lost gets this one by a hair. they were both aight but lost had some more and better multi's.
vote ---lost

[T.J.]

vote=lost
hit harder and more consistent than jaydubwya. i liked lost's flow better too.

[jaydubuwa]

good job lost!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Lost Titan]

good battle

[jaydubuwa]

lost- i knew u had it from the beginning ,my rhyme wasn't good but hey at least i tried.

[Lost Titan]

yo props if you ever want to battle let me know