The1NOnlyEvidence vs. jaydubuwa

[Ignyte]

jaydubuwa

sounded alot better, abit simplistic but kept the rhyme and flow

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

yo i guess jay took this one....but i say we keep it goin cuz right now i feel like spittin...so if u wanna keep this battle goin then battle back....if not just drop some feed backon how i do...aight peace 1

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

after that BATTLE u can throw away yo RATTLE/
but i herd the peeps like a rancher wit his CATTLE//
my flow needs WORK, but ima go BERZERK/
my bright white SHIRT reads van city not iraq or TURK//
stayin true to tha GAME, its a sad sad SHAME/
that u think im just LAME, but taht ignites my FLAME//
rippin MCs like anal TEARS, u just cant TOUCH-ME/
all i SEE is nasty GLARES, u just fat and UG-LY//
i think i SHOULD, break out my 5 WOOD/
smash u real GOOD, leave u dead where u STOOD//
im as CRAY-ZEE, as killer clown john GA-CY/
just like a bitch u MACE-ME, but it just dont PHASE-ME, ok//
i aint about-to-PLAY, u come around-my-WAY/
i mold the fuckin youth just like an artist-use-CLAY/
u have no SAY, an i MAY, just cause a FRAY, or even a MALAE, but thats fine with MAY(me)//
i know im just-a-ROOKIE, but im here for GOOD/
bitches come at me wit-dey-NOOKIE, just like they fuckin SHOULD//
but yo im just about-to-be-DONE, this wasnt a great ONE, but it was good enough to say WHERE THE FUCK HE CAME FROM?

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

lits more tehn 15 bars....but whatever just spit ur shit as long as u want.

[vitodeluca]

Dude, just a piece of advice, you don't have to capitalize the words that rhyme, peeps will be able to figure it out.  Another thing people look for as far as rhymes on this board go is a little more complex of a rhyme scheme, incorporating multis and rhyming more than on word at a time, ie if you took your first line "after that battle you can throw away your rattle" and made it somethin like "aint hard-to-tell by your prattle that you got rattled in battle," or somethin, ya know?  That's just off the dome, but I hope you get the picture.  Just tryin' to help.

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

yo vito thanks for the advice amn thats what i was lookin for....i just thought id try explaining myself better in hte last one but i went a little overboard i guess..haha..oh well im just learning man just tryin to feel how its done around here...anyways thanks again homie...peace 1

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

so let me see if i got u right...
as an MC u have no skillz, u just poppin pills and sendin bills while i be out lookin fo thrills, and it kills, me as a playa in this game, i have no shame its all lame, u just cant be who u claim...stating u a gangsta, ur store bought u will get shot  if u get caught u just a wanksta, pranksta, little boy spanksta, best move out the way or get got by my tanksta, or a shanksta in ur fuckin flanksta...shit, if u knew how raw i was, u would be shocked how its on lock and u get rocked if u step cuz.......tell me how that is homies

[vitodeluca]

DAAAAMMMMMNN HOMIE!  Seriously dude, you just improved like 1000% , that was cool man.  Now just incorporate some multis and some metaphors and you'll be a stone cold killa!  Peace man.

[White-Chocolate]

ya G, once you got that down then just tidy shit up a bit cuz ur lines are so long, just space it out and shit, make it loook PIMP y'know lol
peaze

*nice shit by the way, i agree on the improve bro

[jaydubuwa]

Actin like farmer joe, fuckin ur scraggled tooth hoe wit her nasty camel toe/
This shitz realistic ,ur view's too optimistic got me goin ballistic tryin to make u realize u got wack logistic/
Ya need ta learn ta describe yo shit , no onez feelin ur vibe not even a lil bit, me beatin ya once has u in a hissy fit, like a little bitch still suckin his mamaz tit/
Just cuz I'm a female doesnt mean I'm destined to fail -got u goin crazy like a dog chasin his own tail/
I'm not a ditzy chick thinking Im too ritzy to truthfully say ur a limp dick odeed on viagara havin all tha gurlz u pursue say sayonara/
Shit in a conflict I wouldnt use mace but I would make sure my fist would shatta ur mad hatta face and be so fast that tha cops wouldn't match my pace/
Hopefully this is tha last battle we share cuz  anymore of ur thoughtless rugged style I couldnt bear-thinking ur off tha wall technique would make this battle yours but ya don't get tha drift that theez words come quickly like sweat out my pores that catalyze u to cry like a bitch ass on all fourz/

[jaydubuwa]

replied- had shit ta do-sorry took so long

[vitodeluca]

Hey jaydubuwa, good verse, better than 1n only's.  I dunno if you guys are battlin' again or what, but I think a lot of people won't think to look here, maybe you should move the verses to a new thread?  You female huh?  You fine? Just wonderin...

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

aight i have to say...jay ur shit was tight i liked it a lot...even tho we battlin i gotta give u props...and thanks for the input guys...the more the better cuz obviously i got better after i took it....so yeah we should move this thread...ill give it a go cuz i dont knwo how to do it but ill figure it out...ill reply to that verse in a bit jay

peace 1

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

Ayo, used to be the1nonly, didnt realize till God showed me, that im hot so He got a new name fo me/
ThaProphecy, not as it seems, ur whack rap tactic turns back and smacks u in the fuckin bean/
Farmer i think not, and if u do get shot it will not stop till i hear ur fuckin head pop/
shit, im hard like a diamond, like the ones in my ears bitch how could u not find them, im rhymin like i won the rap heisman, im blindin cuz so bright i be shinin/
U lack a lyrical attack, as a matter of fact i think that after that fat sack i just might react like shaq eating a big mac/
U know how it goes, my flows stop ur shows like popos bustin hoes/
Finally i must state, that viagra i might just take, and stab ur ditzy ass with my dick in yo face, the cops will see yo pace, smack u around realease the hounds  as the sirens sound i wil be given 7 days grace

i dont know how that is....i dotn know im just no feelin it right now

peace 1