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The1NOnlyEvidence vs. jaydubuwa

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Ignyte:
jaydubuwa

sounded alot better, abit simplistic but kept the rhyme and flow

Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..:
yo i guess jay took this one....but i say we keep it goin cuz right now i feel like spittin...so if u wanna keep this battle goin then battle back....if not just drop some feed backon how i do...aight peace 1

Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..:
after that BATTLE u can throw away yo RATTLE/
but i herd the peeps like a rancher wit his CATTLE//
my flow needs WORK, but ima go BERZERK/
my bright white SHIRT reads van city not iraq or TURK//
stayin true to tha GAME, its a sad sad SHAME/
that u think im just LAME, but taht ignites my FLAME//
rippin MCs like anal TEARS, u just cant TOUCH-ME/
all i SEE is nasty GLARES, u just fat and UG-LY//
i think i SHOULD, break out my 5 WOOD/
smash u real GOOD, leave u dead where u STOOD//
im as CRAY-ZEE, as killer clown john GA-CY/
just like a bitch u MACE-ME, but it just dont PHASE-ME, ok//
i aint about-to-PLAY, u come around-my-WAY/
i mold the fuckin youth just like an artist-use-CLAY/
u have no SAY, an i MAY, just cause a FRAY, or even a MALAE, but thats fine with MAY(me)//
i know im just-a-ROOKIE, but im here for GOOD/
bitches come at me wit-dey-NOOKIE, just like they fuckin SHOULD//
but yo im just about-to-be-DONE, this wasnt a great ONE, but it was good enough to say WHERE THE FUCK HE CAME FROM?

Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..:
lits more tehn 15 bars....but whatever just spit ur shit as long as u want.

vitodeluca:
Dude, just a piece of advice, you don't have to capitalize the words that rhyme, peeps will be able to figure it out. ;)  Another thing people look for as far as rhymes on this board go is a little more complex of a rhyme scheme, incorporating multis and rhyming more than on word at a time, ie if you took your first line "after that battle you can throw away your rattle" and made it somethin like "aint hard-to-tell by your prattle that you got rattled in battle," or somethin, ya know?  That's just off the dome, but I hope you get the picture.  Just tryin' to help.

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