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free flow
bostonboy:
i was listening to a pharoahe monch beat "tha truth" and started typing, so this flow has rediculous runon sentances and no rhyme breaks can you feel the flow though?
Nation facing, non complacent graces from clandestine places... disgracing races that made it with no payments/ or food or options on how to live/ doomed so somethings got to give, way for a new day more money better homes, and new ways to raise your seed while they grow/ and new ways to play without drugs or thugs running shit on your street corner, a break from the bums that try ta rape daughters, no gun shells or mortars when love prevails its over/ but how do thugs love when the slugs keep em duckin, how do you trust love when love keeps you runnin, and trusts gone long before your conscience formed, this thugs gone long before his pops was born, the irony of fate gains weight each day, tired of this place but in place I stay, feels like my shoes glued to tha ground n prey to the to tha lord thank god I found em, bound to my surroundings pounding ounces of chopin to give my sorrows drowning, lounging puffin ...grounded, lost my mind for a minute, fuck it, I found it... im spitting different words slurs n mixin verbs, but as I curse n drop verses my thoughts keep dispersin n no words can describe what im feeling, so alive but I hide from whats real n whats worse than a person hides on tha insides a perp in hearse for his last ride, twenty one n buried on his backside n wish he heard that truth before be breathed for tha last time
'Illicit':
well yeh the flow is a lil off, but if this is a freestyle, then my opinion of it is good, you had a message in a few lines and the wordplay was good. nice work.
|JEM|ILL|:
you need some work home boy, but im guessin you new to the game so it's coo...Flow was off, rhymes were kind of forced...keep elevatin...
Azul!
bostonboy:
cee ride thanks for the crit......... 2nd nature obviously your strictly a textcee and dont flow much...... try and flow on the spot to a song, no editting, all the wordplay and metas in the world couldnt help you
bostonboy:
its interesting hearing critisism from people on forums, when you flow in reality n people love it
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