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|JEM|ILL|:
10 lines...
Due Sometime today man...

|JEM|ILL|:
*Steps Into The Thread With Writers Block...*

Seated-by, I'll hit him with more heated-dimes then Toledo-Banks...
Im the president of hip hop now, and Im here to Vito-Fakes!
Wack Fuck, im takin a toll so ima tax ya like one of the thread-feds..
Call the meds,I got an' more dots on ya then the complexion of red-heads!
Wordplays dead, you killed it..I didnt, Vito's a fluke or mis-print..
Call you the new Mike Tyson, cuz lately ya punches are non-existent!!

It's pressure time Vito, I aint letting off till I hear an ass crack...
Snap ya spine in 2, and leave ya running off like a halfback!
Come on kid step to Jem..So I can quickly blaze ya ass...
Vitos, like Mobile home garbage, nothing but trailor trash!

vitodeluca:
Elite need a sign, how tall ya must be-to-stay, this ain't B2K, I see-today the way
you startin flames on threads with elite-in-ya-sig,//
but ya threads are "wearin thin", like burt be discreet-in-ya-wig, burnin bridges
at both ends till there's not a-fleet-for-tha-kid,// (1)
I'll "beat in ya head", like dre for fifty, like I fedex'd ya heroin I got dope delivery, ya tried to show credibility,
when ya lied in ya excuse against me,//
 when morton and everready is ya only a"salt" and battery,like a cliff and wile-E ya scared ta step to me, give ya an answer to "who still don't like me?"// (2)
lil romeo startin' mad beef like he mc'n a cattle drive, I'll end ya life, leave ya still ridin' pine,//
not a pine bench, a pine-box, my nine-pops, make his whine-stop, ya might have beat pops, // (3)
but I'll torture ya before anyone on the board figures out if ya wackness is nature or nurture, put ya outta your misery,// (4)
like who wants to be a millionaire, I'll put your life in order, you're born, start puberty, battle me, and ya history,//
wants in elite as a starter, prolly-never-will, form your own crew, call it the lollipop-guild, show you about half a 5'9, and it prolly-not-"build",// (5)
sonny just chill, give the heat-a-blizzard, meet-the-wizard, cause battlin me you lack a heart, a brain, and the courage to deliver....//

(1) Burt Reynolds
(2) Wile E Coyote in the road runner cartoons/ Jem started a thread called "who still don't like me" or something
(3) M-Dogg, head of elite
(4) He's still young, so nature or nurture, get it?
(5) Royce the 5'9's album, build and destroy, lollipop guild was the munchkins in Wizard of Oz, next bar refers to that as well.

vitodeluca:
votes please..

abstruse:
Jem - Nice verse. The metas, wordplay and punchlines were on point. If you wrote that with writers block, thats pretty good. Overall - 4.25

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It's pressure time Vito, I aint letting off till I hear an ass crack...
Snap ya spine in 2, and leave ya running off like a halfback!

Vitodeluca - Nice verse always. Your verse had everything, from punches, to wordplay, all that ish. Only problem was I couldn't depict a static flow, I think you should go back to ya old style Vito. Overall - 4.15

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lil romeo startin' mad beef like he mc'n a cattle drive, I'll end ya life, leave ya still ridin' pine,//

Reason, they both hit hard, but i'm voting Jem because his flow was more consistent.
Overall - Jem[/b]

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