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Bez .:VS:. Jemuel (Round 3?)

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vitodeluca:

Bez- Dude, you really improvin' man, especially in your punches.  Imma give you a little more detailed vote than usual cause you really tryin' to elevate ya game.  The thing about your verse was some of your punches were really good, some were not.  Here's the ones I liked...

Droppin lyrics to cease-ya (Cesar), ya shits older than a roman, you ain't offendin me like a "your a midget" diss from Gary Coleman//
You a claim to be tough-kinda-child, but if you was trapped on a desert island ya wouldent last-a-day, I'd hunt ya down cos I'm rough-in-da-wild quick to tear ya cast-away//
You remind me of Usher, ya a bitch no matter what ya do, I don't mean to rush-ya (Russia) but ya best leave cos ma lyrics will scar ya ass like a fucked up tatoo (tatu)//
Ya lyrics are like a lady with no arms.....there harmless bitch, how can anyone take you seriously when ya droppin more corny shit than a farmers kid//

These were iffy..

Ya punches don't hurt physically yet ya claim you've been arrested five times, what did ya do throw peanuts at people, cos thats the only way they could be assaulted (salted) by a lyin fool like you//
Ya couldent drop somethin cold if ice cubes slipped outta ya hands in the winter, you'd still get more false starts than me if I was a hard of hearin sprinter//
Ya rhymes couldent be outter this world if an alien stole em and faxed em back, ya shits weak like Snoop when a neptunes beat laces a track//




These were a little weak IMO

Ya remain difficent, mentally insoficant, ya lyrics are plain-as-jokes I'm leavin ya brain-wit-strokes so thats where we're different//
I bet ya cross dress so much ya can't open ya closet for dresses, ya gotta force it, Ya walk around with ya crotch hangin down sayin ya like pain..........try wearin a corset//
My life's been drastic I've had a pencil-and-paper to survive-on, I don't need to plastic to stensil-a-hater, I've found ya, but we both know who's the alive-one!!!!//

The other thing about some of your punches is ya sacrified ya flow for the sake of the multis or the punches.  The key thing now is bringin' everything together, flow, punches, multis, ya know?  

Overall, ya strongest verse to date, I'd give it a 3.9/5

Jem, nice verse man, flow was tight, punches tight, good wordplay and all that.  Not much I can say against ya verse.  Favorite line:

It's a fact that u use ya sharp teeth to conceive-ya-writs
I wish i had more personals, but no one ever peeps-ya-shit!!

that shit was tight dogg, LOL literally.  

Overall, I'd give ya verse like 4.2/5, really strong verse, not amazing, but really strong.

So, although Bez came better than ever, Jem just had the flow, the punches, the multis and the wordplay and put it all together really well, so...

Vote: Jem

|JEM|ILL|:
drop me a link via PM if you need a vote or any feedback Vito...Uppin for votes...

Nice shit Bez...liked ya verse...

2-0

bez:
Yer fo real nice shit Jem, I dont mind battlin you cos ya always drop sumit nice.  As Vito said I am still tryin to put everything together so dont expect to think your gunna be up 3-0 against me and I aint gunna do shit. lol

Nar for reals, nice verse Jem, thanks Vito and Sin for the advice and shit, much appreciated.  I am still tryin to elevate to the point where I am considered a worthy challenger but until then I will just keep battling.

Nice shit tho Jem.

ARYC:
i won't write a long vote so if u don't wanna count this ,no prob.

bez , as every1 has said u have improved but jem is on a different level right now.
some of ur metas were good others weren't ,like the "assaulted" one.u can't/shouldn't take part of a word and make it a meta,ur meta should've been punch using "a salted" ..

so my vote :


JEM

|JEM|ILL|:
KO...

You surprised me Bez...Beautiful homie...lol nice job on the real tip though.

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