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Trauma-san:
Pretty good, you have talent.  I think if you took more time on yourself to delete the redundant and the cliche's it would all work better.  Not hating.


For instance, the first line if you analyze it it becomes obvious that you just wrote that so you could set up the word "Kaliedescope".  It doesn't even go with the rest of it.  

bez:

--- Quote from: Trauma on November 11, 2003, 04:42:12 PM ---Pretty good, you have talent.  I think if you took more time on yourself to delete the redundant and the cliche's it would all work better.  Not hating.


For instance, the first line if you analyze it it becomes obvious that you just wrote that so you could set up the word "Kaliedescope".  It doesn't even go with the rest of it.  

--- End quote ---

LMAO.  

Mack it was dope, Trauma this is keystyle man not fucking rocket science.  Read the rhyme for what it is and don't actually try and analyze a rhyme because:

    a:  Nobody gives a fuck anyway
    b:  It was a dope rhyme anyway
    c:  Your theories are bullshit

Peace

Trauma-san:
Just giving creative criticism, you can't take my words from me. I'll say what I want, when I want, wherever I want.  

da_notorious_mack:
fuck you both wrong...traumas right but he aint linkin the bars together....while i associate activatin ya sub conscious with smokin weed....aint no thang....

Trauma-san:
^^ That's how you intended it, then, but I didn't catch it that way.  It'd be better if it was obvious what you meant, and didn't need interpretation.  It's all piciune anyways, you're good, I was just trying to find things you could improve on.  The last thing you need is everybody kissing your ass.

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