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Pillow:
yo i posted this poem a while back in the keystyle forum under "poetry" but nothing ever got posted back on it so i thought i would make a thread. i wrote this poem 3 weeks after the 9-11 attacks. it is the best piece of work i have ever done, i may even get it published. feedback would be appriciated.......


TWO THOUSAND ONE, NINE ELEVEN

Two thousand one, nine eleven
Five thousand plus arrive in heaven
As they pass through the gate,
Thousands more appear in wait

A bearded man with stovepipe hat
Steps forward saying, "Lets sit, lets chat"
They settle down in seats of clouds
A man named Martin shouts out proud
"I have a dream!" and once he did
The Newcomer said, "Your dream still lives."

Groups of soldiers in blue and gray
Others in khaki, and green then say
"We're from Bull Run, Yorktown, the Maine"
The Newcomer said, "You died not in vain."

From a man on sticks one could hear
"The only thing we have to fear.
The Newcomer said, "We know the rest,
Trust us sir, we've passed that test."

"Courage doesn't hide in caves
You can't bury freedom, in a grave,"
The Newcomers had heard this voice before
A distinct Yankees twang from Hyannisport shores.

A silence fell within the mist
Somehow the Newcomer knew that this
Meant time had come for her to say
What was in the hearts of the five thousand plus that day.

"Back on Earth, we wrote reports,
Watched our children play in sports
Worked our gardens, sang our songs
Went to church and clipped coupons
We smiled, we laughed, we cried, we fought
Unlike you, great we're not"

The tall man in the stovepipe hat
Stood and said, "Don't talk like that!
Look at your country, look and see
You died for freedom, just like me."

Then, before them all appeared a scene
Of rubbled streets and twisted beams
Death, destruction, smoke and dust
And people working just 'cause they must
Hauling ash, lifting stones,
Knee deep in hell, but not alone

"Look! Blackman, Whiteman, Brownman, Yellowman
Side by side helping their fellow man!"
So said Martin, as he watched the scene
"Even from nightmares, can be born a dream."
Down below three firemen raised
The colors high into ashen haze
The soldiers above had seen it before
On Iwo Jima back in '44

The man on sticks studied everything closely
Then shared his perceptions on what he saw mostly
"I see pain, I see tears,
I see sorrow - but I don't see fear."

"You left behind husbands and wives
Daughters and sons and so many lives
Are suffering now because of this wrong
But look very closely. You're not really gone.
All of those people, even those who've never met you
All of their lives, they'll never forget you
Don't you see what has happened?
Don't you see what you've done?
You've brought them together, together as one."

With that the man in the stovepipe hat said
"Take my hand," and from there he led
Five thousand plus heroes, Newcomers to heaven
On this day, two thousand one, nine eleven

peace.....

..::TinMaN::..

Doggystylin:
so many other bigger tragedies in the world i never see anyone write about them.....

how bout the palestine vs israel battle with over like 5,000 dead

what about afganistan and all the casualties there, how would u like it if some country bombed your wedding?

what about all the poor people in africa starving, and all the innocent kids with HIV?

what about all the other people suffering all over the world because of the US?

it seems like the US is all that matters to you people, it doesnt matter where were from, were all human

Pillow:
i ll keep my mouth shut on ur comment dog...

Doggystylin:

--- Quote ---i ll keep my mouth shut on ur comment dog...
--- End quote ---


why because im speaking the truth and it shut you up?

Pillow:
na dogg, u speak the truth in some ways i ll give u that, but they way u said it wasnt tha best put. it sounded kinda fucked up. i lost some friends in that attack and its a big ass deal dogg. we have never been attacked on american soil b4 and it may happen again. and america tries to help every1 man with there problems but we cant take care of every country. i mean look, we dropped food on afghanistan and the mother fuckain taliban took that shit away, that was fucked up. we know whats goin on out there, but it aint happing to us so we dont write shit about it, and the ppl its actually happeing to and being affected by it more then likey dont have a comp to post about tha shit....... u sound a little in considerite to what happend to america on 9/11

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