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TiNmaN:
First to 3 votez winz
A str8 3-0 K-Oz only
15-20 bar Limit

Some say i have the noze and featurez of eminem, quite RECNOIZABLE//1
I do have faultz so i am CHASTIZABLE//2
Keep it real on a daily, try not to lie to MUCH//3
Could hav a heat in tha trunk, get called out, N' not even BUST//4
TinMaN make ya RUST//5
Like-a cop put-cha in CUFFZ//6
Heavy red BLUSH//7
Loved by many like pot-headz-ta-DUCTCH//8
Me n my pen a perfect match like STRACHKY n' HUTCH//9
Chop n' dice-ya-UP like a COLD-CUT//10
Turn my best friendz BACK named MACK on hiz own brother MACK w/ 30 9 mm bulletz frum the GUN-RACK//11
BEAT THAT (ha!)//12
But ya CANT, so jus FORFIT//13
I am to big-for-ya DRAWFIN//14
Seriosly malfunctioning your brainz ENDORPHIN//15
TiNmaN true rariety like the last name MORPHIN//16
Why you agreed to battle me i dont really know//17
Your gonna looze, but wont be a NO-SHOW//18
Which i ll give ya, along with a LOW-BLOW//19
Reached 20 barz, itz ova, cuz i demolished ur TORSO//20

da_notorious_mack:
blah b.lah...i got a minute imma see what i can do..


bullets got ya face red,l say they paint yo mug..
an you can say its no beef..
but all im sayin is there aint no love....
take those slugs,you dead when the tech bus...
i got guns that clear blocks like tetris...
even ya momz said ya shouldnt have stepped up.
comin back like he got a rep up...
see my barrels are twins...so i wont grapple wit him
stick the gun down his throat..an rattle his chin...
see every battle i win...
so steppin up..was the stupidest act...
sinced adam first tasted the apple of sin..
watch the death rattle begin..when mack rewinds..
when the "pillow biter" used to kidnap rhymes..
dissin femcee then doin the same shit..
thats some lame shit...
get a heart from the wizard,gimme summat to aim at..
see its mack..ya know the one you sweatin..
a "pointless vitcory!"
why complain?..dude it the only one you gettin...
leave ya wit nuttin but bad memories..
like single divorced mums do weddings!...

huh

vitodeluca:
Vote= Mack  um, just had the keystyle elements, I've critiques like a thousand mack verses so I ain't gonna go too much into it.  Mack some of ya punches were a little off
i.e. "even ya momz said ya shouldnt have stepped up.
comin back like he got a rep up..."
anyhow, good verse overall, not ya best but good.

Tinman-Umm, dude, ya need to work on ya punches, I mean
"Some say i have the noze and featurez of eminem, quite RECNOIZABLE//1
I do have faultz so i am CHASTIZABLE//2" ain't even a punch, ya know?  The whole point of a battle is to go at the other person.  Plus, ya don't need to capitalize the words that rhyme, people will still get it ;)  You just gotta look at every bar and ask yourself "am I dissin/going at the other person?"  If not, don't spit it. Anyways, keep workin' on it

PZ

TiNmaN:

--- Quote from: vitodeluca on February 24, 2004, 04:55:34 PM ---Tinman-Umm, dude, ya need to work on ya punches, I mean
"Some say i have the noze and featurez of eminem, quite RECNOIZABLE//1
I do have faultz so i am CHASTIZABLE//2" ain't even a punch, ya know?  The whole point of a battle is to go at the other person.
--- End quote ---
Thanks for ur input, i appriciate it. But i think that statement is argumentable, cuz i understand what ur saying. But w/ thoze 2 opening barz i waz jus tryin to get across that i am not comin in to tha battle jus thinkin i am tha shit n gonna win. Basically that i am not the best rapper n dont give a fuk cuz i keep at n pushin. But EVERY bar doesnt have to be DIRECTLY at the person, who the fuck made that rule. N for the most part any way most my verse did hav punches direcrted towardz mack. ANYWAY i am twisted, thanks for votin, there startin to get rare round here....

bez:
mack, no doubt

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